Young Adult / COLD (Analysis)

This is a good piece and I enjoyed it. However, it should be posted under the poetry section, not young adult. Also, I suggest a little editing and formatting – there is a typo in the second line.

I want to start by saying best of luck because I never had it in me to put my work out there when I was your age. You have taken your first step into a bigger world so to speak!

That said, this looks like it has potential to be a solid poem. The problem is that there is no flow to the piece. In some cases there are a sentence but in others, there are a single word in the line. You should try to even it out with more sentences or more single word statements.

Again, keep on writing and best of luck!