Poetry / The monster across the hall

He waits and he watches until I’m all alone.

Why do you do it is what I want to know,
Why do hate me..what did I do?

I hate what its made me but still love you the same,
Alone you’re a beast but in public your tame.

I hate myself but should I instead hate you?
Would that make you happy or is my end coming soon.

I told another and wish I had not,
I don’t want you to be in trouble, don’t want you to get caught.

Do you know that I still love you?
Is that what you want..

What am I to you?
A sister or a runt.

Should I show you the marks from what you’ve made me do,
Or should I preserve your ignorance of  the filthy, rancid truth.

I’ll leave you my love but it is left for he whom I once knew,
not he who now occupies my old room.

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January 20, 2008

stum

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stum reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

This is so sad. I feel so sorry for the persona! Got to get some grammar edited, like Alone you’re a beast but in public your tame, should be in public you’re tame. Overall it’s not a bad poem, and the last four lines wrap up everything.

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January 20, 2008

by Annah

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Thanks, I hate to say it but its kind of an autobiographical poem.Thanks for the grammar notes!I’m a tad lazy when it comes to my numerous typos!= )

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