Haiku/Senryu / Judas Kiss

I’m sorry to say that I don’t see the message in this poem.  Perhaps I’m just missing it.

Ouch. This is scorching hot with passion and a sort of evilness that goes with it. I want more of your work!

So fatalistic, yet understandable.

My only suggestion would be to change ‘his’ to ‘its’ so that it is more universally accepted.

Why did you choose the title? I get a lot of imagery from it, and when trying to relate it to your poetry, I see a kiss without affection or tenderness, an automatic gesture, which, in itself, is a betrayal to the heart that yearns for affection to be returned.

interesting take. the idea of the heart linked in with the home, i assume qua its happiness in the home relation. could also be interpreted in 2 ways: 1) the home as a non-organism, 2) people in the home not wanting the person back.

ambiguity is always a plus in haiku i reckon.

nice work.

The core theme or idea of this is interesting and multi-layered--could be religious, romantic, even patriotic--but the repetition of the first two lines undermines the power of it.  Is there a way to use different words to add variety?  

Judging by the title, and the use of capitalized ‘H’, that this is a religious piece.  I’ve read it many times, but still can’t get into it.  I find it moving, especially the last line.  It seems so simple, yet the complexity has me flummoxed.

Well it paints an interesting picture. I assume you intentionally capitalized Heart and Home. Nice job.

A well written piece.

Very nice. I like the way you change things around in the second line.

Such a well thought out haiku!