Haiku/Senryu / Night Vision

then don’t stare into my light!!!!

and dont stand so close to me as you are dripping on my foot.

wear your galoshes!
AND your sun glasses ;-P

Good comments.
my point was that the person standing there nude
is not necessarily the woman of your dreams,
the perfect 10, the playboy centerfold…
nevertheless when she removes her clothes
none of that matters, you are in the presence
of the goddess energy she embodies
and you are bathed in the light of that.
maybe a little cliché
but after all, it is only a night vision.
;-)
Thanks for your careful and considerate review.
I like your style!
E~

Thanks! This is the 2nd time since I came on 3+ weeks ago that I’ve been compared to Rumi. It is lovely that one can be simple.
I know the subject is overkill
but you noticed the title.
Sweet!
Thanks for the time and the thoughtful review.
Did you ever open my review of your limerick? I never saw that you commented.
I have a version of it to send you.
Want it?
;-)

I don’t believe I’ve ever written a limerick in my life!  you sure it was me?

Actually, I realized after sending this and going back
to my ‘work’ that you were, in fact, NOT the person in question,
although I do have a limerick revision for him…
You should certainly try your hand at the form,
at least once or twice.
In my opinion you have a way with words, which might
allow you a nice, new, short medium
on which keep your claws sharp!

thanks!

thanks for reading and commenting.
See you in the queue

yes, this could be a meta-haiku
couldn’t it?
thanks for comments!

Sorry – after I read it and posted the review, I reread it – and . . . liked it more. That is one thing that I hate about this. After things sit in my mind sometimes, I change my opinion and. . . too late. :)

yeah… it wasn’t until after she took off her dress
that he saw the light either.
;-P

thank you
i appreciate the love!

thanks!!!