Poetry / Noctural Sins

Broken commandment of glass bloody and impure

Gods demandments painted numb in a narcotic shade tree

Pleasure everlasting inside her sweating out in ecstacy

A heretic now and forever born for burning

She crossed the fire and set the blaze inside my damaged soul

Dark tranquility Heaven would reject and cast to the brimstone

In each others carnal grip we are whole; complete

Decadence entangled like serpents with endless hunger

Devour me alive and begin again like an animal in the rage of heat

Nothing to believe in but this lust

Eden slowly burning into the earth one screaming orgasm at a time

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February 14, 2006

Manalove121

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Manalove121 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

It’s very interesting. I dont believe “demandments” is a word, but you can easily tell what was meant. I do like the heated agony of pleasure placed. Very Pain is Pleasure. Thank you, I enjoyed it.

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January 17, 2006

Deleted User

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Once again….brilliant…this is a lil different comming from you. Don’t get me wrong, I love it. Dark and sensual with a load of passion. Great writing as usual. Just one typo. The word “hole”. I’m sure you meant “whole” unless it was used as a metaphor. In that case I apologize. Anyway you would have caought it soon enough. Fabulous read. I love you man. ttys :) _Q

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January 17, 2006

Sinner26

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Sinner26 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Ahh the story of a love so bad that felt too good. I rarely see anything like this, and I have never seen a poem like this that was done so well. Excellent work.