Poetry / Mothers

mothers should not, could not, can not go to waste
no other could take a mother’s place
i bet when you were born,
your mother was the first one that smiled
your mother may scream at you
even go on an anger rage
don’t worry, that’s just a stage
hold on to your mother tight
she can make everything alright
you shall cherish your mother
she loves you like no other

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January 02, 2008

lovepig

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18	F	Durant, OK	October 05

lovepig reviewed Version 2 - Read 100% of the Item

it has something you should work on using more sound devices to really make your message hit some one this peice has a great message but it won’t stick in some one’s head and with a message like that it should

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January 02, 2008

quette123

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29	F	Memphis, TN	March 01

quette123 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

i like it. it is a very true sentiment. i would consider changing the last line to she loves you like no other. keeping writing and working it’s not always a instant sucess.