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Haiku/Senryu / Haiku Police (Analysis)
Haiku police raid:
Rounding up stray syllables,
Standing thoughts in line.
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nubadunk reviewed Version 1 -
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I know it’s a haku but I’m not sure I understand until I read it three- four times. It’s pretty cool that it’s like a raid rounding up strays standing in a line but you used syllables and thoughts as the people in the raid! Creative!
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tisha reviewed Version 1 -
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Very creative. I like the thought of Haiku Police like fashion police. I like the last line the most. It took me a moment to catch it but the idea of standing thoughts in line, as if they are waiting their turns to get their mugshots is wonderful imiagery. Good.
s2poets reviewed Version 1 -
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This is tightly woven. I like the unique feel of this. A twist on words using words. Good job!
slongentl reviewed Version 1 -
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dear Creator,
this was very humorous…”Standing thoughts in line.”...could definitely see a real haiku police force…imagery was great…”Rounding up stray syllables,”
hinton reviewed Version 1 -
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Haha, nice thought. Very good. The last line is the breadwinner.
Panda_Priest reviewed Version 1 -
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I must admit, I’ve never really been a great fan of Haiku. I’m also not sure what is considered good form.
So, in my pea-brained understanding and appreciation of the artform, I will say that i thought this was a cool one.
I enjoyed the concept of your Haiku!
I think if there was a haiku anthology, you could make it in there with this one. It’s cute (really can’t find a better word)
Well done
August_Winters reviewed Version 1 -
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HA, this was genius. I’ve never written a Haiku before, and I probably never will, but that doesn’t stop me from enjoying reading them!
Gardenia reviewed Version 1 -
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I liked this. The metaphor of the Haiku police rounding up words like the real police round up people. It struck me as funny.
Excellent.
myownlilworld99 reviewed Version 1 -
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What an interesting and abstract peice!
A Haiku explaining Haiku… Haha, never heard of such a thing.
So original
oknapp reviewed Version 1 -
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very insightful. very catchy, it all goes together very nicely. I like anyone who can say alot in just a few words. Sandi
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