Poetry / The Toddler Nomad

In your other house tonight,
Superfluous blue security light,
Your empty bedroom strewn with toys,
Lacking the echo of playful noise,
Blackboard retaining childish art,
Aching, longing in my heart,
Self preservation split our home,
Now back and forth you’re forced to roam,
I made the choice, now you are there,
This cross in no way yours to bear.

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January 04, 2008

anonymitysucks

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80	61.1% (18 votes)	35.9%

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19	F	Cleveland, OH	September 21

anonymitysucks reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

your boyfriend writes well. i’m getting several different messages as i reread this…which i like and don’t. i can’t really critique your boyfriend’s work though.

“superfluous blue security light” – wondering how superfluous is applied.

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January 03, 2008

stardust06

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23	100.0% (1 votes)	29.4%

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20	F	United States	June 20

stardust06 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I really like this.

One little thing (think it’s just a typo) last line is it supposed to be is* instead of in*?

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