Flash Fiction / Car Accident

I’m really not sure what you meant by cutting yourself shaving but on second read you accomplished what the last definition states by taking me one direction and finishing somewhere else. Not bad but not my cup of tea.

WTF? i realize flash fiction is about jawdropping twists but i don’t understand how he went from neglecting the road to cutting himself shaving. Mind clarifying?

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January 12, 2008

by ScottBJohnson

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I’ve seen people do a lot of dumb things while driving. Shaving isn’t normally one of them, but hey… if we drink, answer our cell phone, change the radio, put on makeup… why not shaving too?

January 12, 2008

by CourtshipLives

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now that i think about it… good work xD

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Ah… he was shaving and driving at the same time… talk about multitasking… now how could he drive, change the radio and shave?  

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December 31, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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Not very well. Imagine if he had stick shift! :p

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January 01, 2008

by Gunsaku

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I hear ya, Bro. They should build a shaving lane. What do we pay taxes for? Yo, you should sue the county! And get medical marijauna for your injury. Then break me off some ‘cause I was all traumatized from hearing about it. Dude, your like a gene-yes and stuff!  

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Great! Got me on the first read. I’m posting one as well. :) May have finally gotten me off the haiku kick of the past month.

This is freaking awesome!  You accomplish so much with so few words.  Do you need the word “mere” in there?  Aren’t microseconds always “mere”?  I loved this.

54… Ahah, after a third recount, 55 it is! A nice piece full of humor and intrigue. I was quite worried during the middle of it, but the last sentence is a nice ending. I’d say you have done a great job with this “55 Fiction”...but, what do I know? Nice work =]

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December 30, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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I typed in word and watched the word count closely… so I “cheated”. :p People are doing too many things in their cars while driving these days. I wanted to say something about the radio or an iPod… but 55 words… where would I fit it in??

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LOL!  You did get me on this one.  I have to try this form… But not right away!
I would change “driving” to “navigating”.

I am not sure that the snapshot and change lines are necessary – can you find better lines that add more value?

Why are the consequences dire?  This leaves too many questions unanswered in my opinion.

Hope this helps.

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December 30, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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I was going to say that he ruined his white shirt before a business meeting or something like that but I couldn’t find a way to fit it in. Perhaps you are correct and a few of the lines that you mentioned need to come out. This was my first attempt at this form, so I still have to work the bugs out. Thanks for reading! Very much appreciated.

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hey

wow nano-fiction, what an intriguing idea I think I really must try it. Liked the piece, didn’t see the meaning until the end (which is the point as I’ve been told). It works well yet the word driving is problematic, dont see how you drive when shaving (unless it’s a very tenous link) perhaps a more ambigous word could replace it ‘cos at the moment i was surprised at the end by linguistic burglary :P

thanks for posting

Benjy :P

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December 30, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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driving and shaving… yes, they don’t really go together, do they? :p

December 30, 2007

by ScottBJohnson

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“linguistic burglary”... made me chuckle. Good one. :p

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