Poetry / Chaotic Melodies

Trying to find her zen,
All around her – chaos, hell.
It’s getting worse by the day.
Will she run? Or will she stay?
Her mother shouts orders.
Her father begins to cry.
She thinks to herself, at a loss.
“What’s it worth? Why even try?”
What did she do? Why is eveything
She ever does a mistake to them?
So different from her older brother-
Always the favorite, always babied.
She tried to argue, tried to justufy
Her actions, seemingly her every move.
Things have spun out of control
Like a whirling dirvish, a tornado.
It’s running rampant, this nightmarish thing.
She needs to get away, to break free.
She needs to find harmony, and fast
Before she breaks, before she crumbles.
She’s trying to find her zen,
All around her, a complete chaotic melody.

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February 09, 2007

redflames

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redflames reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Hi! Okay so, this piece is very good!!! I love it! So, she is the perfect child, but very stressed out through everything else that’s happening around her. It shows the true thoughts of someone who seems so content on the outside. People don’t ever notice the troubles of others unless they stand out as trouble makers or other things. Very clever! Very truthful!