Haiku/Senryu / Fall

softly rasping words
tenderly building tension
then ending complete.

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January 11, 2008

by saex4u

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46	M	Australia	November 27

hey thanks, it is sitting on number one out of 650, yea!!!

January 11, 2008

by jweeble

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39	F	Falls Creek, PA	February 18

LOL – ooohhh.  Don’t be a stranger now that you are #1. :)

January 11, 2008

by saex4u

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46	M	Australia	November 27

as if I could ever be first in my mind, the best that I could consider myself is as a tag-along, following the auspicious.,.,.,

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I get the feeling of a feline. A wonderful, semi-erotic rensaku.

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January 11, 2008

by saex4u

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Thanks for your appreciation, my day is made of silk, soft and very thank felt praise.,.,.,

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the honeyed hair got me, excellent

Lovely rensaku! I am impressed by the single comma where one has, no business. Overall nearly flawless.

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January 10, 2008

by Gunsaku

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49	M	Westlake Village, CA	February 06

This piece is currently ranked number one in urbis haiku/senryu. congratulations!

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wow
pretty amazing
the sensuality done with such taste
it is like that of a debonair
words are like silk
as they flow telling the story
of physicality

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December 26, 2007

by saex4u

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46	M	Australia	November 27

thankyou so much

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I certainly like your play on words and the imagery as well as the story here. This is somewhat of a turn on. Good write. I am pretty sure this meets the criteria for a Haiku. Seems to match up. Can you have three Haiku’s and call it one? I don’t know. Anyway, I like it.

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December 26, 2007

by saex4u

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46	M	Australia	November 27

More of a Senryu as its about us and not nature, so I am told. I dont know about the three verse thing, but I do enjoy writing both styles, the single verse and also the multiple, thanxxx for your enjoying and encouraging words.

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