Why thank you my friend
auspicious and eloquent
with tactile response
Haiku/Senryu / Haiku
Is surreal breathless
painted trees of gossamer
stammering speechless
proclaimed innocence
stretching northerly with height
as spiders applaud
Their art is stolen
with the ancient path of old
by the gentle wind
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Jaey_Peele reviewed Version 1 -
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This depends on the reader to create an image to be admired: or to be bewildered. If I can read it three time and not know if I like it; I can be sure I’m looking at art! 10 for this piece!
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manoj reviewed Version 1 -
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Lovely haiku string. I enjoyed.
im_dragon_f8 reviewed Version 1 -
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Compounded with articulation while desscribing a story. Very good, Very hard to do. Good job.
metahaiku reviewed Version 1 -
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I give this rensaku collection a ten! The individual verses could all stand alone, but together they form an intriguing structure! Well done!
haikudo reviewed Version 1 -
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Doubly ancient path
Winds of change blow through this piece
Silk scarf against clouds
Fukuku reviewed Version 1 -
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very deep i might add, exceedingly visual
jaiku reviewed Version 1 -
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All three verses ring
Uncommonly insightful
Overall a nine
ThomasAlan reviewed Version 1 -
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This extended haiku builds in clarity through each stanza though the first one is a bit opaque compared to the later two.
This is a lovely image of spiders’ webs in the woods and their eventually dissolution.
I particularly like “as spiders applaud” as a phrase and vision.
The very first line of stanza one and line 2 of stanza three are a bit confounding, but some ambiguity can be fun.
The only thing I really miss is a good title. Give us one?
jweeble reviewed Version 1 -
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First two superb. Last, like but I’m thinking still.
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