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Poetry / midnight snack (an ode to bologna)

round and slippery, heaven scent

i woke up last night and snuck out of the tent

i’m surprised the bears didn’t find you before i did

but i peeled away and brought you back to bed

i start at the red casing and slowly work inward

all the time trying to ignore that you’re icky innards

oscar meyer jingle stuck in my sleepy little head

next thing i know, i was craving some bread!

my goal was a piece of you

sandwiched between slice one and slice two

but finding the car keys was just too much trouble

so i side-fisted the air and kicked at the rubble

bread locked in the trunk

left me in a funk

so i started back to bed

without my sandwiched bologna and bread

alas! what’s this i see?

a can of pringles just calling for me!

so i got an idea and tapped at my belly

that can was just the thing to make everything swell(y)

i pulled out two chips and pulled off some bologna

and that’s how my meat became not-so-lonely

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January 12, 2008

shannygoat

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149	93.3% (75 votes)	17.2%

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33	F	Essex, MD	January 22

shannygoat reviewed Version 4 - Read 100% of the Item

That was cute, though I don’t understand why someone would ask you to write about bologna. Personally, I think it’s disgusting and it stinks. And the part about the sticky innards, dead on! That slime freaks me out. But I love that you could write something about something that you aren’t that fond of and not make mention about your personal feelings on it.

Poetry is not my strong suit, so I don’t have a real critique about the tempo. I did find it funny how you tried to force smell(y) with belly. My only real critique is that you switched tenses. You start in past tense talking about what you did last night. Then when you get to the part where you’re at the wrapping you say, “I start at the red casing…”, which suggests present tense.

I love reading light heart selections. I thoroughly enjoyed it!

Be easy!
Shanny

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November 15, 2007

DarkAngel

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145	57.1% (14 votes)	13.5%

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39	F	Staley, NC	November 22

DarkAngel reviewed Version 3 - Read 100%% of the Item

This would make me hungry for Pringles, not the baloney:).
Anyway, this was very cute, funny, and made me smile.
You are a creative person with a good sense of humor.
I don’t like baloney at all, so I would have probably just
ate the chips LOL!

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November 14, 2007

angelique_07

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28	F	United States	December 12

angelique_07 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I like the play on “heaven s©ent” and I really like the phrase “side-fisted the air.”

What a nice goft to make someone, even if it is about awful bologna!
Fun poem, it definitely made me smile :)

~Angel

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November 11, 2007

DCAllen

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1991	94.6% (1071 votes)	48.7%

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DCAllen reviewed Version 2 - Read 100%% of the Item

How wonderful! I laughed out loud several times. I’m the most critical person on earth but can’t find anything to bitch about here. Wow!!! Oh, OK, let me take another look . . . Nope, still great. Love Pringles.