Thanks for the review.
Yes, I suppose this doesn’t have much of a flow, the first version was worded differently it went like this, “Each petal I pluck is my love for you, and I have an internity of petals awaiting to be plucked.”
I changed it because of some spelling erros, and some thinking about wording it differently.
Quotes / Petal Love V.2
Each petal of a flower that I pluck is my love for you, and I have an endless flower bed.
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Gavinswar reviewed Version 2 -
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Okay its romantic but overly so, I mean if your trying to woo the most poetic of mates then this may help but otherwise its just too sweet.
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Aten2727 reviewed Version 2 -
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I hate to say it but this quote is somewhat cliched and cheesy. It is somewhat romantic and would probably be viewed as sweet and super-romantic if given to your girlfriend but from a writer’s point of view its just too much.
Keep writing though, its good to see that your being creative!
TheRavenOD reviewed Version 2 -
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Aww, thats cute, I like it most people go with the stars in the sky but never the petals on a flower. Its definitly a beautiful quote. Thanks for sharing this with me.
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Awonderfulworldofwrittin reviewed Version 2 -
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A creative way to express ones love.
CynicGod reviewed Version 2 -
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Nawww…. whoever it is, they are very lucky. May you continue your love forever.
Joel_Mitt reviewed Version 2 -
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I missed the first version of this. I’m worried what it was like, considering. I understand the intent of this, but for it to have a chance as a “quote,” it has to flow clearly and be swift. I think this gets caught up in itself, but it could easily be reworked to climb to its tier.
Maybe something like this:
“My love for you rests in each petal of an endless flower bed.”
IndyWalsh reviewed Version 2 -
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I loved this quote. It makes sense, and in my opinion this is far better, than the original, it sounds a lot smoother. ‘Pluck’ could do with some work, I suggest you maybe consider a different word, its not very easy on the tongue, but everything else flows wonderfully.
Well done.
DCAllen reviewed Version 2 -
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As a metaphor, the flower bed doesn’t work for me. It is by nature demarcated. You want a more immediate, clearer image of limitlessness. That said, I’d love to be your partner.
JustGeneric reviewed Version 2 -
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This is a sweet sentiment, and I’ve never heard endless love described quite this way. Thanks for sharing!
Protagoras reviewed Version 2 -
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If it’s an endless bed, then it’s no scarce resource so not very complimentary anyway. I’m not wild about it as the whole flowers=love thing is a cliche on steroids. sorry!
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