Poetry / Vapors

Magnificent piece here.  I love the first 2 lines which echoe absolute destruction but still so, so familiar.
“the misted mountains” are simple but so visual if you’ve ever seen that that is the simplicity of them.
A love poem…who’d of imagined?
You have a brilliance here that pulls the reader in and a clever way of making what seems at first as some kind of horrid deception but then soft, sweet and nearly sexual:  ”a fleeting glimpse”.  Powerful and beautiful.  Thank you for the opportunity.

it was a really cool read at first. but the introduction or poetic setting in the first four line don’t tighten up what’s coming. i mean i can tell it’s solemn but the details of this part which in a way are Historic (to the poem). i just read it again you can really do without those four lines.

you’re incredible when you’re not being too abstract. the Vapors idea is pretty sweet. and the way it ends it so straight up what poetry is about, dat mystery, whenever you decide to make a new version you’ve to tell me ‘cos i’d like to add this one as a favorite.

isai

very nice…  concise…  well written… really, nothing here for me to criticise…

Beautiful.

I truly enjoyed this piece.  Thanks for sharing.

Recognizable.  I don’t know if I like that word.  It’s a bit long and awkward for the poem.  The first four lines seem, to me, disjointed from the rest of the first stanza.  Perhaps you could tie them together better.  I get very nice mental images from this piece.  Very enjoyable.  

I must say you did it a perfect 10!
the poetry is well written.
It is simple and yet meaningful.
I completely understood what you wrote about.
And overall I say Bravo!

This is sweet. So sweet. I envisioned everything as I read it. I really like this! :)

hmm. not bad. the first stanza is kinda ‘meh’ it feels pretty shallow. the second stanza i like it alot.

Love the first 3 lines and the lines from misted to breakfast. I thought this line was unnecessary “that seem an entire universe apart” because the first 3 lines I thought were sufficient. “carried away ” offers the readers some questions. How far was she carried away? Carried away, as in wants to get married? Interesting piece.

boy sunday eves must be the premo time for good poetry here it seems. very nice. but missing who after the girl.

i wonder wat dis morning intrigue is supposed to be.