Poetry / Swept By Pretty Eyes And Laughter For A Time.

This is ok but it lacked the passion.  It bubble gum and puppy love.  It lacks passion and maturity of a seasoned writer. I love you, the song meant something to me, to you it was just a song, you don’t like me like I like you, I’m crushed.  What makes this different or special?  Where is the uniqueness?  Needs more work

This piece didn’t really do much for me.

The first two lines have an awkward format that confuse and distort their meaning—I would fix that.

The images are much too vague. Especially in lines such as: “I miss you& the things you said to me. The way you smiled at me. And the way you looked at me”. Plus I would change “&” to “and” obviously, especially considering that it is attached to the word “you” before it.  

And lines such as: “The one that still makes my heart melt” are very cliche.

Least favorite stanza:
“I think my feelings for you
were so much more.
It hurts knowing.
your feelings for me.
were so much less.”

The last two lines didn’t leave much of an impression on me either.  

I guess this poem has some potential. Work on it. I can see many redrafts to come.

Good Luck.

This has potential, but the main thing you need to do is show us something instead of just telling us about it. The best way to accomplish that here is to start with cutting the last three stanzas. We can assume all that from the first two. You have sort of a foundation of images in the first two stanzas, but now you just have to elaborate on them. Tell us about this song. I’ve never heard it before, make me want to. What’s so special about it? Why did it have such a deep significance to the relationship in question? Then tell us the exact way this person smiled at you, the exact way they looked at you, instead of just telling us you miss it. Then, I think you will have a very solid piece of poetry.