Poetry / Try to hold it back. [Just try.]
It’s complicated not being sure about how someone else feels.
it’s even more complicated not being sure how you feel yourself.
Hold on? Let go?
One feels right. The other sounds perfect.
Wanting to go back into time to do what feels right.
Wanting to go back into time to do what sounds perfect.
Confusion isn’t even half of it.
Don’t expect me to understand where you’re coming from.
You made all the moves. You decided what to do.
Not knowing the difference between right and wrong.
We both fucked up.
Genuine or Misleading?
You tell me.
It’s obviously not what i thought.
because where are we now?
fifty miles apart.
zero phone calls away.
a million thoughts different.
In her position.
realizing how she felt.
Not even close.
i had it and lost it.
Mistakes happen.
regret? or forget?
one sounds right. the other feels perfect.
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This is a down to earth poem, filled with a lot of real emotions. I like the honesty and simple phrases. They really convey the message in the poem in a clear cut, almost brutally honest way. “because where are we now” really sticks in my head for some reason, just like “we both fucked up”. You can’t get any more raw emotion of regret than that.
Kudos.
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I understood it perfectly. Too well. I had no sense of emotion with this at all. I felt as though I had walked into the middle of an argument between two teenagers.
You hit the nail on the head, to use a cliche as worn out as this piece, in paragraph 5.
You for writing, me for reading.
Sorry.
Great work! I love “zero phone calls away” fantastic line. I also how you worked a central idea in your piece and then reworked it at the end to add a stamp of finality to the poem. NICE NICE NICE
I say its better to have regret than forget it. I loved the poem and would encourage you to keep writing and keeping true to your own voice.
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