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An enigma enshrouded within
a shadow wrapped around
a box entwined with a clear black bow.
Fascinating, captivating drawing me in.
It cannot be named, nor explained
yet I yearn to be let within
the deep recesses that
reside inside.
To untie the bow
unleashing Pandora’s box of
darkness like a silent wraith
hovering over the past
the present – the once and the now
forever and never, once more
and again – until we blend
no beginning, no end.
The keeper of the lore
alone never more.
The mystery
revealed only to me.
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zionicyouth87 reviewed Version 1 -
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Kerry_Lee reviewed Version 1 -
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Really enjoyed how this flowed.Quite dark, liked it x
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gymchik104 reviewed Version 1 -
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This is great and I can definitely see it being published :)
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Mario007 reviewed Version 1 -
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I think you grasped the basic feeling of inspiration and how we get out own ideas inside our heads. When I read the last few lines I was really entranced by the use of the dark imaginary that drew me in. I like that sort of think as it creates exctitment.
I’ve read the suggestion of dedicating the poem to H. and I don’t think its such a good idea. Maybe actually dedicating it to someone you knew would work better..
Fizz_e_o reviewed Version 1 -
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ooh..This sent little shivers up my spine. An excellent piece; dark and mysterious. The poem “feels” like you’re trying to go around the “object of desire” alas to no avail – like a moth to the light: shown in the lines “It cannot be named, nor explained//yet I yearn to be let within//the deep recesses that//reside inside.”
A couple of suggestions – change lore to lure possibly (play on words almost). And make the dedication a part of the poem -it adds to the mystery.
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