Poetry / Adoration

I love how honest this is. And although it’s poetic, I like the way you show the raw emotion, without any flowery rhyme and “mushiness” to overshadow what you feel. Well done!

Nice man.
I like the way you describe how great love can be.
But love has its demons.
Shows the power a woman can have over a man, seduction.
Good job.

This reads more like prose than poetry.  I can detect no discernable meter.

The word “unendless” in the second line confuses me.  I enjoy poets who use words in new ways or create new words, but this word doesn’t work in the line.  Do you mean “unending” or “endless”?  ”Un” here means “not”: so are you trying to say “not-endless”?

And I can find no meaning in the letters “uneeded” in the last verse.  Is this a misspelling?  I tried “unneeded” and “unending” as alternatives, but neither worked in the line.

I really enjoyed this poem, particularly the imagery of ‘answers were sugary/
Blended malts of promises’: it has a melt in the mouth quality about it.
In the last stanza you use the word ‘uneeded’ and I wondered if perhaps you meant unneeded?
Other than that, this is a strong poem and your structure is consistent.

“Such joy, such adventure
Such unendless feelings of yearning,”

are there any concrete images you can add to make your reader feel this, too?  instead of telling me you feel joy and yearn, you should work on making me feel joy and yearn.  what’s so great about this woman?  i want to be enraptured, too!

also, i think by “unendless” you mean just endless.  or unending.

Throughout this piece you tell the reader too much.
For example:
“Such joy, such adventure
Such unendless feelings of yearning,”

Why tell me about joy and not show me. What is this joy you talk about or this adventure. For the most part, you are feeding the reader abstracts like “love” and “fear”. If you show the reader, the reader has the ability to really be in the poem, to pull from their own lives this and that, and not just read the poem. In other words, if you show more, if you are specific and use poetic devices, you can bring this work to life.  

“stood inside her love”  very good, I can feel it, I can almost picture it.
Second sranza
“Yet Adoration has its devils,
I delved too deep,
and maybe I did  find what
I was looking for”    I like the sense of this….but the last line doesn’t quite work for me. I like what your saying a lot, but maybe rephrasing it.

Last staza, LUV IT. leave it as is.

Over all I think it is really worth the ink! Thanks for sharing it. (and sorry)