Poetry / Still Standing

I’m standing still in the desert alone.
but not alone
I’m standing still in the desert, immobile of anything
but not alone
I’m standing still in the desert, decisions blazing on my conscience
I’m stuck in a state (of mind) that I’m not familiar with
I’m too good for this routine.
stagnant. no control. monotonous routine
fearing to be alone.
but not alone
I’m standing still in the desert watching the cacti age
but not alone
I’m still standing in the desert
possibly not good enough for you to be accompanied by.
standing in the desert.
where have the colors gone?
I need blending. I need hues. I need difference
I’m standing still in the desert.
with nothing I love. nothing I crave. nothing I desire. nothing I admire.
nothing.
I’m standing still in the desert
completely alone.

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March 30, 2008

aslistless_asme

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aslistless_asme reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

A lot of repetition that can work in some circumstances but seemed a little overboard in this piece. Definitely some good imagery with when comparing the “alone” and the “desert/”