Limericks / it's all in how you use it

I have sat here trying to follow your suggestions but every way thus far leaves me off by one syllable.

I’ll have to think about it some more. Thanks for the suggestions, however…k

That’s exactly the road I wanted to lead readers down, yet you’d be surprised at how OBTUSE some people are! Good grief, it was like leading a group of 4th grade Catholic school boys into a brothel house…I am by no means an accomplished limerick writer, but please.

Thanks for your understanding and the review! k

Yes, you could very well be correct; it has been a long while since I wrote this limerick. In fact, it – like all of the limericks on this site was in the one and only batch of limericks I’ve ever written and I’ve only made alterations to one of them, I believe?

Having said that, I was probably most concerned with starting out with an idea, which I thought had some humor to it and making it ‘fit the pattern’ as you so succinctly put it.

It is my hope in the future to find the inspiration to revisit limericks again with a better understanding (with all the reviews I’ve received and all the additional reading I’ve done) of them and perhaps do a more thorough job of it. One thing I will try to do is create more fluid lines; at least three of my poems were slightly stilted yet fit the limerick pattern.

Thank you for your review. k

I feel like I should apologize – I never mean to sound so blunt, but I hate running on in the reviews when there is not too much to say anyway – since you have to pay. :)  I understand – I have gotten the same criticism about mine – but if you slack off on the meter – the limerick police really slam you. LOL

I like your work – it is always hard to find something to say to improve – even though I never know it is yours until I post. :)

You don’t need to apologize! In fact, if you aren’t careful and overpraise a peice or ask a question of something out of the ordinary, you could actually get an email or something saying it didn’t meet review standards.

Say what you mean and try to give good advice. What you said was true and with this particular form (and some of the Haiku, say) I really don’t know enough about them to move around in them fluidly.

Now, if you’d attacked my sense of humor or my choice of topic…that would have been an entirely different matter

or if you’d been vicious and unfriendly…

But for the most part I survive the truth and thrive! (heck, I’ve heard it may even help me improve?!!! I have my reservations about this but I’ll let you know how it goes, okay? ) k

LOL! I’ll let you know if I ever figure out the self-improvement thing!
Jen

Hey – guess what? My name is the same. But I go by k

LOL you are weeble too? :)

Jen
but most recent nickname was agent 867 :) (5309)

I am not weeble but I recognize that phone number from the song.

I assumed and you know what they say about that – har, har, har – Jen was short for Jennifer. If incorrect, I stand corrected. k

It is – Jennifer Lynn in fact. Why k?

Limerick police? Are there such creatures? Oh MY GOD! Then I’ll just close my eyes when they appear and they’ll disappear! so what do I care anyway? Pssht! (for a minute there my heart rate actually accelerated or something).

But anyway – I’ll consider ways to edit it down perhaps without losing the content which I’ve been told is somewhat humorous.

Thank you for your review and comments. k

My pleasure.

Your picture is interesting by the way. How did you manage to keep your hair dry?

R

I was standing on the banks of this river (we’d just walked all over and across it). Later, I went back in with an art/drawing program and basically ‘scribbled’ on the lines in blue and beige – which you have mistaken for additional water! Funny, eh? k

Thank you so much for your review and comments. I’ll read more reviews further on, and when I get a general consensus that leads me to either a) work; or b) rhythm; or/and/or? I have no idea c) punctuation!, I’ll decide why I even respond to these comments. I’m just a really big jackass, I guess. Not. I’m sorry. I’m laughing right now. Gutta naucht. k