Poetry / Grunion Memory

Excellent imagery, I like the poem. The only suggestion i could make for improvement is to put a comma after “and no home”. The whole theme was wonderful.

Extremely likeable, well sir you paint vivid pictures in this, keep it up.

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August 28, 2007

by meghancurley

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sir….hmm…

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Raw
sadness appears
imagery
no home—i can only wonder, what the hell happen
where’s family
enough
you may have to fill me in “Never.”—ill never stop loving you

This was a nice piece.  Why the reference to the fish in the title?  I didn’t understand that.  I like the imagery and the emotions it brought forth in me.  I can visualize the scene and the event and the tension and anticipation.  

Good job over all.  I like the word coronal – I had to look it up and seen that it is related to the tongue and phonics – a sound made using the tip of the tongue and grunion is spanish for grunt and also a fish.  Nice word play.

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July 30, 2007

by meghancurley

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grunion are small fish. people can go to watch the grunion “run”...their mating ritual is that at high tide they basically come up on shore and the female lays her eggs while the male wraps himself around her and deposits his sperm. At the next high tide, the eggs hatch and the new grunion are washed into the sea. Guess I was trying to draw a parallel. Thanks for the review and attention to detail.

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