Screenplay / Artifice
INT. HALLWAY, ARTEMIS AND DIANA’S HOUSE—EARLY MORNING
A series of black-framed photographs hanging on the wall of the hallways show two black-haired girls as they get older and older. In the baby photos, held by beaming mom and dad, they are indistinguishable. As they progress through toddlerhood, they wear different colors of the same outfit, but, happily cuddling, continue to look like two copies of the same little cherubim.
Moving down the hallway through the more recent photographs, the girls look more and more different; one has cut her hair, and the other wears it very long and slightly curly. They dress in different styles, and no longer even share the same photographs.
The professional senior portraits, side by side in simple black frames, show two girls who are as different as possible in every aspect that they can control. The long-haired girl, her face heavily colored with make up, grins at the camera, surrounded by her curls and the plain background of a studio. The short-haired girl, who opted for a black and white photograph, is not quite looking at the camera, smiling more to herself than anyone else, in an outdoor setting.
BEGIN MONTAGE: GETTING READY FOR SCHOOL
INT. ARTEMIS’ BEDROOM—6 AM
Artemis’ room, pale yellow, is clean and feminine. The most prominent piece of furniture is a vanity, complete with lights above the mirror, whose desk top is covered with little bags and bowls and baskets of beauty products and jewelry.
The alarm clock starts beeping. ARTEMIS turns it off, and slides out of bed, stretching. Her eyes and hair are the same almost-black dark brown. She wears a shirt and long pajama pants, and her hair is braided. She unweaves it as she walks to her bathroom.
INT. THE TWINS’ BATHROOM
Artemis steps into her combination of a shower and a bath tub, and a puff of steam escapes into the room before she draws closed the opaque shower curtain.
The bathroom, though it only has one sink, is clearly shared by two people: a complete set of toiletries sits on either side of the sink. Artemis’ side is obvious because everything is collected into matching yellow bags, bowls, and boxes, and there are an awful lot of products. Diana’s side has only a line of the most basic necessities.
INT. DIANA’S BEDROOM—6:10 AM
Diana’s room, pale blue, has a highly similar layout to Artemis’, but is not quite as well-kept. Where Artemis had a vanity, Diana has a writing desk, covered with a mess of half-completed projects. A few pieces of Diana’s artwork decorate the walls.
The first alarm rings. DIANA smacks it off again, grumbling, and rolls over, blissfully returning to sleep.
INT. SHOWER
Artemis rinses the soap from her body, chasing the suds off with her hands. She uses her fingers lightly, as if she felt that even alone, someone might be watching.
INT. DIANA’S BEDROOM—6:30 AM
Diana’s second alarm rings. She sets it to a later time, her bare breasts peeking out over the covers as she leans. We see that she must be Artemis’ identical twin. She rolls over again, and snuggles back under the blankets.
INT. BATHROOM
Artemis sits on the edge of her tub, her hair wrapped in a towel and her body clothed with another, rinsing her foamy razor in the trickle of water from the bathtub faucet. She shakes the razor twice, sending a few drops of water flying, and returns to shaving her legs.
INT. DIANA’S BEDROOM—7:00 AM
Diana’s alarm clock rings again. She resets it again and returns to sleeping without a moment’s hesitation.
INT. BATHROOM
Artemis finishes rubbing lotion onto her legs, closes the bottle, and stands, clinging to the towel around her body to make sure it stays on. She puts the bottle with a large collection next to the only sink, and picks up her toothbrush instead.
INT. DIANA’S BEDROOM—7:30 AM
Diana’s alarm rings. She smacks it to turn it off, groaning, and climbs out of bed. She wears boxer-style underwear and nothing else. She pads over to the bathroom door, through which she hears her sister’s blow dryer.
END MONTAGE (CONTINUES INTO SCENE)
Diana knocks on her door to the bathroom.
DIANA
Hey, Arty, open up.
INT. THE TWINS’ BATHROOM
Artemis continues drying her hair.
ARTEMIS
I’ll just be a minute.
DIANA (O.S.)
You’ve already been in there
forever!
Artemis shakes out her hair, rolling her eyes.
ARTEMIS
Wait your turn, Diana.
DIANA (O.S.)
(whining)
Artemis.
ARTEMIS
(whining)
Diana.
DIANA (O.S.)
(whining)
I have to pee!
Artemis turns off the blow dryer, half-throwing it onto the counter top.
ARTEMIS
God, can you be any more crude?
Fine, I’ll unlock the door, but
don’t come in til I’m out.
She unlocks the door, grabs a large makeup bag from the counter, and storms out, closing the door loudly behind her. Diana walks in, grabs a clock from her side of the counter, and hangs it from the shower head.
INT. SHOWER—7:32 AM
The clock reads 7:32 exactly. The water turns on.
INT. ARTEMIS’ BEDROOM
Artemis leans in to her mirror, scrutinizing her face for a moment, before she pulls foundation from her bag and starts to apply it.
INT. SHOWER—7:37 AM
The clock reads 7:37 exactly. The water turns off.
INT. BATHROOM
Diana stumbles out of the shower and grabs a towel. She uses it for a cursory dry off, then wraps her hair in it, unconcerned about showing skin. She kicks the bathmat over next to her sink, and drips on it as she brushes her teeth.
INT. ARTEMIS’ BEDROOM
Artemis, her face almost complete, touches a mascara brush to her eyelashes, her mouth hanging open absently as she applies this final touch.
Her door slams open, and she drops the brush and container.
ARTEMIS
Jesus! Diana!
Diana enters, holding her towel loosely around her body, her hair a soggy mess.
DIANA
Where’s my hairbrush?
Artemis puts the brush back in the tube of mascara, and yanks two tissues from her tissue box.
ARTEMIS
Knock, will you?
She starts wiping up the spilled makeup. Diana doesn’t move.
DIANA
Sorry, but I need a brush and mine
isn’t there.
ARTEMIS
Well, I didn’t take it. You
probably lost it in your disaster of
a room.
DIANA
Then can I use yours?
ARTEMIS
No, who knows what will happen to
it?
DIANA
(whining)
Artemis.
ARTEMIS
(whining)
Diana.
DIANA
(whining)
It’s time to go.
Artemis grabs her brush and throws it at Diana, who catches it and grins.
ARTEMIS
Fine! Take it!
DIANA
I love you, Artemis.
INT. DIANA’S BEDROOM—7:45 AM
Diana, sitting on her bed, brushes her hair and pulls on purple polka-dotted stockings at the same time. She is mostly dressed, in a black and gray plaid skirt and a half-buttoned white shirt. There’s a knock on her door.
DIANA
I’m almost done.
ARTEMIS (O.S.)
Just grab the rest and let’s go.
Diana drops the brush, gathers up her shoes, purse, and backpack. She picks up two ribbons from her dresser, holds them against her stockinged leg, and drops the worse match. She turns back towards the door just as Artemis opens it and the ribbon flutters to the ground.
ARTEMIS
Ready?
DIANA
Ready.
Artemis holds the door open for Diana. As Diana goes past her, she smiles, a secret display of affection, and then closes the door.
INT. THE TWINS’ CAR—MORNING
The passenger door opens and Diana tosses her shoes onto the ground in front of the seat. She slides into the car, holding two protein shakes.
ARTEMIS
Got our bags?
Diana puts one drink in a cup holder, buckles her seat belt and opens the second bottle.
DIANA
In the trunk.
(offering the second drink to
Artemis)
Here.
Artemis takes the bottle, drinks one long gulp, then hands it back to Diana, who settles it in the second cup holder.
ARTEMIS
Thanks.
Artemis starts the ignition, and reverses the car out of the garage.
Diana puts on her shoes.
DIANA
Don’t forget to buckle.
Artemis complies without comment. After a beat, Diana leans over and turns on the radio: Beethoven’s moonlight sonata. Both girls smile.
EXT. SUBURBAN STREET—MORNING
The car drives away from a nondescript middle-class house, past dozens of near identical houses and their carefully groomed lawns.
INT. THE TWINS’ CAR—MORNING
They pull up to a red light, and stop. Automatically, Diana stops fiddling with the ribbon in her hair and hands Artemis her drink.
DIANA
Oh, I forgot to tell you, Benny
wanted to see us.
ARTEMIS
(drinking)
Mm?
DIANA
I think he wanted to take our
picture. Some new project. I dunno,
I told him we’d meet him after
school.
The light changes, Artemis hands her drink back, and the car moves forward again.
ARTEMIS
How? Practice starts right after
last hour.
DIANA
Oh geez, you’re right! I completely
forgot that you’d started already.
Um, I’ll talk to him about that
during math?
EXT. SCHOOL PARKING LOT—MORNING
Their car pulls into the parking lot, driving past rows of filled spots.
INT. THE TWINS’ CAR—MORNING
Artemis drives slowly, looking for an available spot.
ARTEMIS
Try to get him to wait til the
weekend. I really don’t want to
have to do this over lunch.
DIANA
Hey, there’s an idea! Lunch today
would be perfect.
Artemis pulls into an empty spot.
ARTEMIS
No, lunch today would be terrible!
Artemis reverses, re-enters the spot, getting it right
ARTEMIS
I sit with my friends at lunch.
She turns the car off and removes the keys from the ignition. Diana takes the keys, hands Artemis her her purse, grabs her own purse, and climbs out of the car.
DIANA
Gee, thanks.
Artemis shoulders her purse, opens her door, holds it open with her leg while she picks up the drinks, and exits awkwardly.
ARTEMIS
Oh, don’t be like that.
EXT. SCHOOL PARKING LOT—MORNING
Artemis closes her door and follows Diana to the back of the car. Diana opens the trunk and pulls out her sister’s backpack.
ARTEMIS
(continuous)
You know I didn’t mean it that way.
I love you, it’s just…
Diana hands Artemis her backpack, and shoulders her own.
DIANA
Not in public. You’re so fake, sis.
Diana closes the trunk with a resounding thump. Artemis gives her her drink.
ARTEMIS
I just have different priorities.
Both girls drink simultaneously, draining the bottles.
DIANA
Whatever. I’m telling Benny we’ll
see him at lunch. You’ll have to
get over your ‘priorities’ and sit
with us, or else we’ll come to you.
Diana walks off, to the school’s main entrance. Artemis looks after her in frustration for a beat. A blonde girl comes up behind her, and puts an arm around her shoulder.
STACI
Artemis! Hey!
Artemis covers her small frown with a wide grin and gives her friend a hug.
ARTEMIS
Good morning, Staci.
They follow Diana into the brightly lit halls of Andrea Dworkin High School.
INT. ENGLISH CLASSROOM—DAY
The class is set up as a seminar, twenty students around one table. Artemis and Diana sit in opposite corners, as far from each other as possible. All the students have large anthologies open in front of them. A few mark in their books, most take notes on separate pages. Artemis writes in a spiral notebook as the student sitting right next to the teacher continues in what has been a long rant.
STUDENT
I mean, yeah there’s a woman, but
she’s just not important. Beowulf
is clearly the focus of the piece.
If it says anything about the role of
women, it says they don’t have one.
They didn’t influence history.
The bell rings.
ENGLISH TEACHER
I’ll look forward to seeing you
support those ideas with the text.
(to the class)
All right, everyone, we’re going to
continue our discussion of gender
roles in our in-class essays
tomorrow. Spend time with the text tonight
to find your quotes, plan your
points, and think. I’ll see you tomorrow.
All the students close their books, gather their things, and shuffle out of the classroom. Diana lingers a little longer than the others, still reading her anthology: she has skipped to the back of the book, to modern poetry. She finishes “This is just to say” by William Carlos Williams, murmuring the last lines to herself.
DIANA
Forgive me. They were delicious. So
sweet, and so cold.
She smiles, closes the book slowly, and follows her classmates out.
INT. HALLWAY—DAY
Diana is the last to exit the English room. As she enters the stream of students, BENJAMIN, already divested of his books, flags her down.
BENJAMIN
Diana! Fair goddess!
Diana laughs, and starts walking with him.
DIANA
Hello, Benny. Walk me to my locker?
BENJAMIN
Not if you call me that. My name is
Benjamin. Like the president. Benny
isn’t even dignified enough for a
dog.
DIANA
Sorry. So, uh, Arty’s play practice
is right after school.
BENJAMIN
Diana! I said today at the latest
They arrive at Diana’s locker. She avoids eye contact, taking a littler longer than perhaps necessary to unlock it.
DIANA
I know, I know, but it’s okay, we
can talk at lunch, right?
The door swings open and she starts loading it with her books. It’s not particularly tidy, but there is an order to it.
Diana throws the enormous English anthology onto the floor of the locker.
BENJAMIN
What does Arty think of this plan?
Diana shrugs, puts her pencil bag on top of the stack of books, and starts rummaging in her backpack. Her backpack is old and worn, covered with little pins. Some make political statements, some are souvenirs from vacation trips; most are nerdy jokes.
DIANA
She’ll be fine. It’s just lunch,
right?
(pause)
Hey, have you seen my new lunch
box?
Diana pulls the lunch box out of her backpack: an old-fashioned metal box with the iconic World War II image of Rosie the Riveter, shouting in blue on yellow that “We can do it!”
DIANA
(continued)
I got it in a museum gift shop.
BENJAMIN
Very cool.
DIANA
Yeah, I saw it and I was just like,
that’s perfect. Of course, Arty was mortified
when I started bringing it to
school. But it keeps everything
from getting squished. But anyway,
I’m babbling, we should get going.
They walk away from her locker, together but with an awkward silence between them.
INT. CAFETERIA—DAY
Diana occupies a table by herself, her lunch unpacked in front of her: two yoghurt cups, a plum, and a scone. She hasn’t started eating anything yet. Around her, the room swarms with activity: people exiting the cafeteria line and sorting themselves into categories by table.
Benjamin arrives with his lunch tray and sits across from her. He rearranges the items on his tray, fidgeting. Diana opens one of the yoghurts and starts to eat.
BENJAMIN
So, uh, how is Artemis, anyway?
Benjamin opens his bag of chips and eats a few.
DIANA
She’s…very much herself.
BENJAMIN
Has anyone, um, that is, is she
dating again?
DIANA
A little. Nobody’s really sticking.
They spend a few moments acting completely absorbed in their food.
DIANA
Look, it isn’t my place at all to
say this, but- we miss you.
BENJAMIN
Yeah, well, I miss you too, but it
was never my call, was it?
DIANA
Sorry.
Artemis walks by, chatting with her friends.
ARTEMIS
Oh, sorry guys, I totally forgot, I
have to talk to these guys about
something.
Her friends groan in exaggerated protest.
ARTEMIS
(continued)
I know, I know, totally awful, but
I made a promise. I’ll see you
after lunch, kay? Love ya.
She waves them off, watching them titter among themselves as they settle down at their usual perch. Then she turns to the table where Diana and Benjamin sit: there is an empty seat next to each one, and the both look at her expectantly.
She sets her tray down next to Diana, and sits with her sister, across from Benjamin. Artemis has gotten a large helping of cottage cheese, a salad with tomatoes instead of croutons, and an orange. For a beverage, she has managed to acquire Starbucks coffee.
Artemis rips into the orange, flinging the bits of peel onto her lunch tray.
ARTEMIS
So, can we make this quick? I have
other things to be doing right now.
DIANA
Um.
BENJAMIN
Sorry, Arty. So, uh—
ARTEMIS
What did you call me?
DIANA
Uh—
BENJAMIN
I called you Arty.
ARTEMIS
My name is Artemis. Like the
goddess. Arty isn’t even dignified
enough for a dog.
DIANA
Guys, please. I know this is
awkward, but can we please stop with
the open hostility?
ARTEMIS
Diana, there is a reason I have not
spoken to this boy since we broke
up.
BENJAMIN
Oh, yeah? Is it because you feel
too guilty and I’m a reminder? Or
is it just because you’re so stuck
up you can’t stand having anyone
around who doesn’t worship you?
Artemis grips her coffee cup firmly.
ARTEMIS
Actually, if you must know, it’s
because I don’t trust myself not to
hurl hot liquids into your face.
Benjamin half-stands, leaning across the table
BENJAMIN
You’re just—
Diana stands, putting one hand on Benjamin’s shoulder to hold him back. He looks surprised, as if he hadn’t even realized he had stood up.
DIANA
Stop! Just stop it. God, I can’t
stand you two sometimes.
She pushes him back into his chair.
DIANA
(continued)
Now. Benjamin. Please. Tell us what
you wanted us for.
BENJAMIN
Well, my dad’s a photographer,
right? One of his famous friends
was looking for models for this
concept she had, and she asked him
is he knew anyone, and he didn’t,
so he asked me. She wants high
school girls, identical twins, who
haven’t modeled before but who
would enjoy having their pictures
taken and shown. She said, uh, she
said it might be good if they were pretty,
but it was more important that they
have, well, she called it “a transcendent
inner beauty.” And I guess it was
dumb, but I thought of you guys.
Diana looks touched, Artemis skeptical.
DIANA
Benjamin, I…I don’t know what to
say.
ARTEMIS
I do. It’s not going to work,
Benjamin.
BENJAMIN
Huh?
ARTEMIS
If you’re doing this as some sort
of crazy plan to get me back, it’s
not going to work.
BENJAMIN
No, that’s not it at all. I mean, I
thought that maybe you’d like it,
but I don’t expect you to like me
again. This is between you and my dad’s
friend.
DIANA
Artemis, what if we just met her?
Talked about it a little, maybe,
see what she’s looking for? It
could be cool.
ARTEMIS
Diana, I…
(to Benjamin)
We’re going to need to talk about
this. How about you give us the
photographer’s number, we say
thanks for letting us know, and we
go our separate ways.
BENJAMIN
I suppose that would work. But, uh,
let me know if you’re going to turn
her down, so I can tell my dad,
okay?
ARTEMIS
We’ll let the photographer know.
It’s her project, not yours or your
dad’s.
BENJAMIN
Right, right…um.
He pulls his wallet out of his pocket and looks through it.
BENJAMIN
(continued)
She gave me her card. Dum de
dum…ah, here it is.
He gives it to Artemis, who pockets it without looking at it.
DIANA
Thank you so much,
ARTEMIS
Thank you, Benjamin.
Artemis looks at him silently until he picks up his tray again and stands to leave.
BENJAMIN
Right. Uh, yes. I’ll…I guess I’ll
see you around then. Um. Bye.
He walks away. Artemis watches him go for a second, then turns back to her food.
DIANA
Not going back to your friends?
ARTEMIS
I figure, I’m already here. Damage
done. Don’t read into it too much.
They both begin to eat.
INT. KITCHEN, ARTEMIS AND DIANA’S HOUSE—NIGHT
The kitchen is large and decorated in warm colors. A huge wok sits on the stove, full of vegetable fried rice. A stack of four plates sits on the counter top near it. A round table by the window, where they all eat, has a small vase of fresh flowers.
Artemis and Diana’s MOTHER fills up the four plates with food, handing them off to the girls and their FATHER.
The twins’ parents are still dressed from work, mostly; their father has discarded his jacket on the back of one of the chairs and loosened his tie. When she makes her way to the table with her own plate, we see that their mother, although he has left her hose on, has discarded her high heel shoes.
Artemis, Diana, their father and their mother file from the kitchen to the round table, their plates full of stir-fried rice with a dozen different vegetables. They sit around the dinner table and begin to eat.
DIANA
So, Ben—that is, we heard that
there’s a photographer looking for
twin girls to model.
FATHER
For a magazine?
ARTEMIS
We don’t know, it sounded more like
an art thing, but I don’t think I
want to do it.
MOTHER
If the photographer’s an artist, it
might be worth considering. I’d
love to have some beautiful
pictures of the two of you to put around
the house.
FATHER
(to Artemis)
Is the photographer a friend of
Benny’s dad?
Artemis doesn’t answer, looking at her plate.
DIANA
Yeah. Benny said she was famous.
FATHER
Mr. Davidson has good taste.
MOTHER
Oh, they could be lovely in the
living room, you know, that empty
wall?
ARTEMIS
But they could be terrible.
The two girls turn towards each other, cutting their parents out of the conversation.
DIANA
We don’t know anything about what
kind of pictures they would be.
ARTEMIS
Exactly!
DIANA
So we should find out.
ARTEMIS
Then you talk to her.
DIANA
But she wants both of us.
ARTEMIS
She might. We might not even be
what she’s looking for.
DIANA
Yet another reason to meet her!
ARTEMIS
I think it’s a waste of time.
DIANA
I think we shouldn’t turn it down
until we know what we’re turning
down.
MOTHER
I think Diana has a point, lovie.
FATHER
You don’t have to agree. Just let
the photographer know that you got
her message, and see what she
wants.
MOTHER
What harm could it do?
DIANA
Here, a compromise. I’ll call and
everything, if you promise to come
with me to see her this weekend.
EXT. MARIE’S STUDIO—DAY
The twins stand outside the front door. Diana is in a brightly patterned dress, with color coordinated hair clips, bangle bracelets, and ballet flats. Artemis wears a faded T-shirt and jeans, her long hair painstakingly curled for the occasion.
DIANA
She sounded really nice on the
phone.
Artemis looks unimpressed. Diana rings the doorbell.
DIANA
I think this is going to be really
cool.
After a moment, the door opens, and MARIE greets them with a huge, welcoming grin. She is dressed simply and practically.
MARIE
Hello, girls! My name is Marie
Stratton, but please just call me
Marie.
(to Diana)
And your name is?
DIANA
I’m Diana.
MARIE
(to Artemis)
Which must make you Artemis.
Excellent to meet both of you. Come
on in!
She holds the door for the girls.
INT. MARIE’S HOUSE—DAY
Artemis, Diana, and Marie stand in the small entryway. Artemis and Diana just look at Marie, respectfully quiet, awaiting instructions.
MARIE
How about I give you a tour of the
studio, and then we can talk a bit
about the project?
DIANA
All right.
They follow Marie, like ducklings following their mama duck.
BEGIN MONTAGE: TOUR OF MARIE’S STUDIO
INT. MARIE’S COSTUME ROOM—DAY
Marie flips through a rack of dresses, pulling out a thin white one to show the girls. Artemis reaches out to it absently. Diana walks over to take a look as well, wearing an enormous feathered hat. Artemis laughs, and Marie shakes her head.
INT. MARIE’S SEWING ROOM—DAY
A color photograph of a still life, with the large feathered hat in the center, hangs in the little sewing room where Marie alters the costumes. She points it out to them, then pops out again, leaving them gazing at it.
INT. MARIE’S STUDIO—DAY
Marie leads the girls right past where she actually takes the photos: an empty wall with a handful of backdrops on a curtain rod, and lights of all shapes, sizes, and even colors scattered around.
INT. MARIE’S DARKROOM—DAY
Marie ducks under some hanging photos, leading the girls into the small darkroom. She points out the trays of chemicals, giving a brief explanation of the development process. The girls gawk at the photos hanging up to dry.
END MONTAGE
INT. MARIE’S STUDIO—DAY
They exit the darkroom.
MARIE
That’s about it for the studio
part. I do everything myself, in
these rooms.
She looks around for a moment, at the doors leading to the costume room and dark room, then turns her attention back to Artemis and Diana.
MARIE
All right! Are you thirsty?
INT. MARIE’S LIVING ROOM—DAY
A number of almost matching modern upholstered chairs are arranged around a coffee table covered with small black binders. The walls are decorated with more of Marie’s photos, in different sizes, in slim black frames, displayed the way that some houses display pictures of the family.
MARIE
Go ahead and sit down. Would you
like some tea? Soda?
ARTEMIS
Um, I’d like a coke, please.
DIANA
Just water for me, thank you.
MARIE
Coming right up!
Marie exits, giving the two a moment to look around. The walls are covered in photographs, mostly of plants, none of people. Diana leans in to look at a few, while Artemis sits down and pages through one of the binders.
DIANA
They’re all hers.
ARTEMIS
These too.
DIANA
Any people in there?
ARTEMIS
Not in this one.
Diana sits next to her, and looks through the binders for one that includes photographs of people.
ARTEMIS
Oh…oh, my.
Artemis has found a photograph of a twenty-something woman, and she gazes at it, rapt. Diana glances over Artemis’ shoulder to see, and is also absorbed.
The photograph is black and white. The woman, pale, probably blonde, seems to glow. Her eyes, looking directly at the viewer, are deep black.
DIANA
It’s beautiful.
Artemis turns the page to another woman, much older, also with an ethereal beauty and grace. She turns the page again, and then again.
ARTEMIS
They’re all beautiful.
Marie returns with two glass bottles of Coke, a plastic cup of water, and a little plate of cookies.
MARIE
I see you found my women!
She sets the cookies down, and gives Diana the cup of water, then Artemis the classic glass bottle of Coke, which has already been opened.
DIANA AND ARTEMIS
(in unison)
Thank you.
The twins look at each other and smile at each other in amusement. Artemis takes a sip from her bottle of Coke, which Diana blatantly admires. Marie settles in a chair across from them, and removes the bottle cap from her own bottle of Coke. She sets the bottle cap and the bottle opener on the coffee table, and takes a drink of the Coke.
MARIE
Aren’t these glass bottles cool?
It’s left over from a shoot I did a
while ago. I only started
photographing people recently, but
I must say, it’s a hard habit to
break.
DIANA
Would you really take our picture?
MARIE
I think I would love to. You two
are just about exactly what I was
looking for. I’m not quite
following the usual conventions of
a photo shoot, so it’s important
you’ve never modeled before. You
two have just the right look for
black and white, and I think your
personalities are just what I’m
looking for for my concept. How old
are you?
ARTEMIS
Seventeen.
DIANA
Eighteen in June.
MARIE
But your parents would sign for you
and all that?
DIANA
Oh, yes, certainly.
MARIE
Then there are just a few practical
details. Do you wear the same size
clothing?
ARTEMIS
I think we do. Diana, let me see
the tag on that dress.
Diana turns her back to her sister, who leans over and fishes the tag out of the back.
ARTEMIS
Yeah, I wear a Banana Republic six,
too.
MARIE
All right. And, ah, this might be
the deal-breaker, but it’s important
that you look identical. Including
your hair.
Artemis’ hands immediately fly to her hair, as if to protect it from imminent attack.
ARTEMIS
Can Diana get a wig?
Marie stifles a laugh.
MARIE
Sorry, sorry, I know this is
serious to you. It’s just, this series
is meant to be a statement on
artifice. All about showing people
as they really are. So, uh, a wig
wouldn’t work.
DIANA
But…Arty wears her hair long.
MARIE
I’m not going to force you to cut
it, though I’m not sure it would
work as well if you were so easily
told apart. I might have to look elsewhere.
I’m really sorry, Artemis, to put
you in this position, but I’d want to
give both of you identical haircuts
for the shoot.
DIANA
You’d cut my hair too?
MARIE
Just to make sure they were the
same. But your style would probably
change as well.
ARTEMIS
Can we think about this?
MARIE
Of course. You have my number,
right? Call me when you’ve made up
your mind. Try to let me know
within a day or two if you can, so
I can start up my hunt again if
you’re not interested.
EXT. MARIE’S STUDIO—DAY
Marie waves as the girls walk back to their car and climb in.
INT. THE TWINS’ CAR—DAY
Diana buckles as Artemis puts the key in the ignition. The car starts, and Diana tunes the radio to classical music.
DIANA
Don’t forget to buckle.
Artemis buckles her seatbelt and drives the car away.
INT. KITCHEN, ARTEMIS AND DIANA’S HOUSE—NIGHT
Artemis, Diana, and their parents walk from the kitchen to the dinner table, carrying bowls of pasta piled high with Mediterranean vegetables. They sit, and pass around the napkins and salt, and begin to eat.
ARTEMIS
I think I want to do it.
DIANA
Good.
INT. CAFETERIA—DAY
Diana and JULIA, a freckled redhead, unpack their lunch boxes at the far corner of a long table. The rest of the table is sporadically occupied, but they pay no attention to the others.
DIANA
So, anyway, I am looking forward to
this whole photo thing, even if
Arty isn’t.
Julia looks over to the cafeteria line, where Artemis is accosted but a number of blondes. Artemis has curled her hair today; she makes sure to do so at least two or three days a week, so that people’s mental images of her will include curly hair. Since it is extra, effort, however, she does not always put in the time to curl it.
JULIA
You know, sometimes I don’t get
your sister.
DIANA
Sometimes I don’t get her either. I
mean, she’s a smart kid, but…
JULIA
She hangs out with the dumbest
friends.
DIANA
I know! Oh man, did I tell you that
I saw Staci trying to flirt with
the Brazilian exchange student?
JULIA
He would be her type, wouldn’t he?
DIANA
Yes, but she actually asked him
where Brazil was!
Julia laughs, and picks up her food and takes a bite, assuming the joke is over.
DIANA
(continuous)
But wait, there’s more! It gets
better! He starts to name the nearby
countries, and she interrupts him.
”No, no, I mean, like, is it in
China or something? Or, like,
Africa?”
Diana leans back with a self-satisfied grin, enjoying Julia’s delighted laughter. Julia pretends to toast Diana with her food, and the two girls return to eating cheerfully.
Behind them, Artemis and her gaggle of giggling girls descend upon their table.
JESSI
So anyway, Suzi, is, like, totally
a skanky ho.
KRISTI
Oh, my God, did you see her at
Jeff’s this weekend?
MANDI
I know!
STACI
Hey, Arti, why weren’t you at
Jeff’s?
KRISTI
Yeah, we missed you!
ARTEMIS
I was meeting a photographer.
GIRLS
(in unison)
Oooh!
JESSI
A modeling gig?
ARTEMIS
Yeah, kind of.
STACI
Oh, my god! Who did you wear?
ARTEMIS
She hasn’t taken my picture yet.
And anyway, it’s not that kind of
modeling.
MANDI
Oh my god, you’re gonna be naked?
ARTEMIS
No! It’s like an art thing. Like
you see in museums.
KRISTI
Well, that’s boring.
ARTEMIS
No, I think it’s going to be really
cool.
STACI
But what’s the point? I mean, no
one will know it’s you.
JESSI
Yeah, if anybody even sees them,
the photographer will get famous,
not you.
ARTEMIS
Well, it’s already decided. Diana
and I are going to the hairdresser’s
today.
MANDI
What? You’re letting your sister
tag along?
STACI
What? You’re letting your hair get
cut?
ARTEMIS
She needs both of us, and we have
to look the same.
KRISTI
You should totally just get your
crazy sister a wig. I mean, it’s
bad enough she chopped it all off.
She shouldn’t inflict it on you
too.
ARTEMIS
I told you, I don’t really mind.
It’ll be a cool project. And besides,
it’ll be easier to take care of
short hair.
The four other girls look at Artemis as if she had lost her mind.
MANDI
Um, Arti…
JESSI
I think you’re missing our point.
STACI
It’s not supposed to be easy, it’s
just supposed to look easy.
ARTEMIS
Well, whatever. It’ll only be a
little while, and everyone will
really notice, and I’ll tell them
it’s for a modeling job. Nobody appreciates
anything til it’s gone, so cutting
off my hair is the best way to show
it off. The whole time it’s growing
back I’ll bet I get tons of compliments.
KRISTI
I knew they were underestimating
you. You always have a plan.
(to the others)
It’s all good, girls.
The other three sidekicks look at Kristi for a moment, wishing they could call her on this power play, but restrained, unable to say anything unfriendly.
The bell rings, and Artemis stands up with her tray.
ARTEMIS
I’ll see you in class.
EXT. SCHOOL SIDE DOOR—LATE AFTERNOON
Diana leans against the exterior wall, her backpack at her side, listening to music on an MP3 player in her pocket. She hums along absentmindedly.
The door next to her is pushed open, making a loud metallic noise, which captures her attention. Benjamin struggles to exit, carrying a large roll of chicken wire.
DIANA
Benny!
He rolls his eyes, but doesn’t correct her, struggling with the chicken wire, which is slipping from his grasp; he tries to brace it against his leg, but this takes some of his weight off the large door, and it starts to close on him.
Diana runs up and yanks the door all the way open, smiling at the comical expression on Benjamin’s face; he stumbles forward a bit, without the door to hold him up, then regains his balance.
DIANA
Just a sec, I’ll give you a hand.
She wedges a nearby rock under the door to hold it open, and grabs the other end of the roll of chicken wire.
BENJAMIN
Thanks.
DIANA
Where are you taking this?
BENJAMIN
Mrs. Porter’s art room.
DIANA
That’s a long way. I’ll help you
carry it there.
BENJAMIN
I’d appreciate that. I might even
forgive you for calling me Benny
earlier.
DIANA
So sorry. Old habits die hard, eh?
Diana dashes off for a moment to close the door, then re-claims her end of the long roll.
BENJAMIN
Be careful not to cut yourself or
anything. There are some poky bits.
They struggle with it for a moment before getting it settled and walking off.
EXT. SCHOOL PARKING LOT—LATE AFTERNOON
The two tiny figures and their load, just barely smaller than their bodies, work their way from the far west wing of the school, though the parking lot, to the far east wing.
DIANA
What the hell is all this for,
anyway?
BENJAMIN
I’m doing set production for the
play. We’re building a dragon.
DIANA
Awesome! That seriously makes me
wish I’d auditioned. What show is
this?
BENJAMIN
(confused)
It’s The Hobbit. Uh, shouldn’t you
know? Artemis is in it. I mean, you
were waiting for her, right?
DIANA
Yeah, but man, she never told me
they were doing anything this cool!
BENJAMIN
She didn’t even tell you what show
it was?
DIANA
We don’t talk a lot about that kind
of thing.
BENJAMIN
Weird. But I guess not that weird.
I mean, you are separate people.
DIANA
Yeah.
The conversation falls to an awkward silence. Diana re-adjusts her grip on the roll of chicken wire, and looks at Benjamin.
DIANA
Hey, do you think I can help you
with the dragon? I’ve never done
stuff like this before, but I can
definitely do grudge work. And I’m pretty
good at papier mache. Or, no, I
know! We should cover it with
fabric, like that really shimmery
stuff! I bet if we stretched it
over the chicken wire just right,
it would look like scales.
Artemis stops talking, but is still clearly thinking about grand dragons, smiling to herself.
BENJAMIN
Hey, that could work! And it would
be way lighter and more flexible.
That’s a really good idea! If you
come to Mrs. Porter with that suggestion,
I’m sure she’d let you work with
us. We could kinda use the help.
DIANA
Awesome.
INT. MRS. PORTER’S ART STUDIO—DAY
Diana and Benjamin wrestle with the door.
DIANA
I wonder…if we put fairy lights
behind the fabric, I bet they’d
show through and look really cool.
Oh, let me grab a doorstop.
They get the door open, and Benjamin stands against it to hold it open, resting the roll of chicken wire on the ground while Diana enters the room.
DIANA
(continuous)
We could get, like, flashlights for
the eyes. And cover them with red
tissue paper, to look menacing! I
mean, Smaug is a menacing dragon.
He should have red eyes. Here we
go!
Artemis digs a doorstop out of a pile of old art books, and wedges it under the door. She reclaims her end of the roll of chicken wire, and the two off them lug it into a large work space in the corner, next to a few smaller rolls and other odds and ends. They set it down.
DIANA
(continuous)
I wonder if there’s any way to make
him breathe fire. Does Smaug
breathe fire in the books? It’s
been ages since I’ve read them.
BENJAMIN
You couldn’t get out of making this
dragon now even if you wanted to.
DIANA
All right. But don’t you dare let
on that I am such a Tolkien nerd!
If anyone asks, I am doing it for
extra credit.
BENJAMIN
Your secret’s safe with me.
DIANA
So. Where do we start?
Benjamin checks his watch.
BENJAMIN
We’ll start with the body.
Tomorrow. Practice is out.
Diana looks at him for a second, puzzled, then groans.
DIANA
Right! Artemis. All right. Then
I’ll meet you here tomorrow as soon
as class it out?
BENJAMIN
Bye bye, Di.
DIANA
See you then, Ben!
INT. THE TWINS’ CAR—LATE AFTERNOON
The trunk slams closed loudly. Artemis sits in the front seat, frowning. Diana’s shoes click on the pavement as she walks to the passenger door. Without realizing it, Artemis taps her fingers on the steering wheel to the exact rhythm of Diana’s footsteps.
Diana opens the door and climbs in, automatically picking Artemis’ purse up off the seat before sitting down and settling it and her own purse on her lap. She buckles her seat belt.
DIANA
Don’t forget to buckle.
Artemis buckles her seatbelt.
ARTEMIS
Where were you?
DIANA
I was helping Benny. He and I are
going to be making the dragon for
the play. Hey, how come you didn’t
tell me that you guys were doing the
Hobbit? I totally would have
auditioned.
ARTEMIS
I dunno, theatre just has always
been my thing, not your thing, you
know?
Artemis starts the car, and backs out of the parking lot.
DIANA
You just didn’t want me there,
because you knew everyone would
compare us, and when I stole the
show you’d be embarrassed.
The girls smile at each other, slipping into a more comfortable conversation.
ARTEMIS
Oh, yes, you’re right! After all
these years of practice and classes,
I still fear the day that you
unleash your superior talent upon
the world, destroying all I hold so
dear.
DIANA
Never fear, Arty dear; you would
always have a place as my understudy.
Maybe I’d even let you pretend to
be me once in a while.
ARTEMIS
Wouldn’t that be a disaster?
DIANA
I know! Neither of us would last a
minute. You would be overwhelmed by
our teachers’ high expectations,
unable to answer a single question,
and I would be devoured by your
herd of cannibals.
ARTEMIS
Hey, now, they’re good girls.
DIANA
Sure they are, and sharks are
vegetarians.
Artemis frowns. Diana is still cheerfully joking, but Artemis isn’t responding in kind.
ARTEMIS
At least I have friends.
Diana sits up straighter, surprised and hurt; Artemis has crossed the line from joke to insult.
DIANA
Arty, they’re not friends, not
really. I mean, do you ever talk
about anything important? Or do you
spend all your time with your ridiculous
social conquest?
ARTEMIS
Reputation is important.
DIANA
In other words, yes, you do spend
all your time being totally fake.
ARTEMIS
Diana, reputation is important! If
there is anything I have learned in
my life, it is that everyone is
constantly judging everyone else.
No matter where you go, they are
judging you, and it matters.
DIANA
What is up with you today? It
doesn’t matter, not really.
ARTEMIS
Yes, it does! It does matter! If
you want to do anything in the
world, you have to make a good
impression, you have to have a good reputation.
You have to dress right. You have
to act right.
(pause)
You have to wear your hair right.
DIANA
(suddenly getting it)
Oh, Arty, I’m sorry. I suck so
much. I totally forgot we were getting
our hair cut today.
ARTEMIS
No, never mind.
DIANA
No, listen, I really am sorry.
You’re right. Well, sort of. Well,
I think we both are. I don’t think
it’s important to convince everyone you’re
something you’re not, but your
hair…it’s not trivial.
ARTEMIS
I don’t really want to talk about
it. I’ve made up my mind to cut it,
so I will.
DIANA
I know. I’m making such a mess of
this. I just wanted to say, I think
I understand. And I really
appreciate that you’re willing to
do this.
ARTEMIS
Thanks.
She gives Diana a small nod, and they look at each other for just a moment, not quite fondly, but with understanding, before returning to their windows.
After a moment, Diana turns the radio on. Now, Artemis does smile, and they both relax into their seats.
EXT. RESIDENTIAL STREET—LATE AFTERNOON
The girls’ car drives slowly past a row of small houses.
INT. THE TWIN’S CAR—LATE AFTERNOON
Diana looks out the window intently, reading the house numbers to Artemis, who is checking the other side of the street as she drives.
DIANA
1072…can’t read that one…or
that one…none of these are numbered!
Oh, there’s 1084. We should be
getting close.
ARTEMIS
Do you think we’re in the right
place?
DIANA
I think so. Probably
anyway…1090…Oh, Artemis, there
is is! 1096!
She points to a little blue and white house.
EXT. RESIDENTIAL STREET—LATE AFTERNOON
Artemis pulls into the house’s driveway, and after a moment the girls get out.
ARTEMIS
Now that we’re here, I’m getting a
little nervous.
Diana takes her hand, and gives it a squeeze.
DIANA
It’ll be all right. I’ll go first,
so you’ll know exactly what you’ll
look like after.
ARTEMIS
Thank you.
They stand in the driveway for a moment, holding hands.
ARTEMIS
All right, thank you, I can do
this.
She leads the way up a few steps to the porch, and rings the doorbell. She glances at Diana nervously, as the footsteps on the other side of the door get louder and louder, but lets go of her sister’s hand when they stop.
The door opens, and a short, blonde woman with a wispy pixie cut smiles at them.
AURELIA
Hello, girls, I’m Aurelia, Marie’s
friend. She’s inside waiting for
you. Come on in.
They follow her through the door, and it closes firmly behind them.
INT. AURELIA’S KITCHEN—LATE AFTERNOON
Marie pours tea into mismatched mugs in the far corner of Aurelia’s cozy kitchen. Her style is much messier than Marie’s, with a bit of clutter and little knickknacks, but she, too, has photographs everywhere, of women with gorgeous hair. A few of them were seen earlier, in Marie’s portfolio of portraits; the rest are by other artists, but in the same vein.
A tall stool, set a little apart from everything else, stands ominously atop a tarp. Artemis eyes it.
AURELIA
Here we are! Now, just give me a
moment, and we can get started.
Aurelia deposits the girls in the room, and scurries off.
Marie walks in front of the chair and tarp, carrying two steaming mugs of tea. She turns to the girls.
MARIE
Would you care for some tea?
ARTEMIS
Oh, um
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Oh my I love this! It is really good and would make a great play! I love the way your words flow and the diffrent attitudes and personalities of the sisters (: I like all the changes throughout it too and I love their names!
STACI
Oh, my god! Who did you wear? <- Just so you know this is wrong, it wouldn’t be ‘who did you wear’ for we dont wear people (hehe) we wear clothing so it would be ‘what did you wear? ‘
Also when Diana is walking with Benjamin and is helping him carry the chicken wire you accediantly put ‘Artemis’ so ya know.
Anyways I think this is really good and that you should continue it. I was devistated(Sp?) when you stopped it where you did! I like how the girls even if they do disagree on certian things are still close. (; Love ya writing, write more!
<3 Rockstar-san ;3
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This is very good! There is a lot of suspense and drama and that is exactly the kind of thing that keeps a reader interested. However, this seems very long for one reading- if you’re sitting on the computer reading it, it can get a bit drabby. To fix this I would suggest splitting it into two parts. So that one half can be read and then the other, so that the reader isn’t sitting here for a long time wondering… when will this get over? Although it is very good, I still wondered that because it just kept going, and going. I suggest splitting it after the girls leave the studio. The next time they are at school would be an excellent place to pick up from- it starts the scene off with drama, and that is sure to attract attention right away! Good job!
I hope you don’t mind if I’m completely honest with you. This screenplay really didn’t motivate me that much. I mean, it seems that you really have your characters down. It is relatively easy to tell which girl is which, what her personality is, etc. That is good. At the same time, the story is very slow. Everytime I thought something exciting or interesting was going to happen, it didn’t. I’m just wondering what the outcome might be. What is going to happen next? Is there a point to them getting their hair cut? Why? Why is the photographer’s photos so amazing? Do the girls end up getting sucked into them? That would be cool. Maybe it is just me, but I thought it could use a little more “umph.” At the same rate, I really did enjoy the characters. You have given them a lot of thought and they are very well rounded. Not bad for something kicked out in only a month!
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