Poetry / The Beauty That We'll Never See

This is a great piece of writing. I liked how you rhymed in this poem. very nice details and explanation. Keep up the great writing. You have a talent for poetry so do not stop.  Use you’re imagination and amaze us readers.

This was very effective in insighting real feeling in me. I realy love the line “where someone gentle walks with me”. I saw that you mentioned it maybe being on the religious side. Looking at it again, I see that it could be interpreted that way. I didn’t have that impression when reading it the first time but I admire the fact that it could be inspiring in different ways depending on the reader’s current frame of reference. Anyway, I love this! Thank you for sharing. I’ll be looking for more!

Well I liked this work a lot; infact I really think it’s one of my favorites of the ones I’ve read so far but just a little advice for you. In the second verse where you used the line with ‘worry’ I think it should be something that goes better with the overall flow. “I’d be rid of all these sleepless nights, and the atrocities which follow” something strong and of that sort.