Lyrics / Immeasurable Sound
Sitting around in a granny flat
No thanks; I’d rather not talk about that.
But all alone that’s where you sat,
Now everything’s gone and you wonder where at?
Up in a flash, gone with a crack,
Wander the globe for a merry match-up mate
Left you in quite a confusing state?!
But all along you figured it square
And maybe not but so who cares.
When an umbra shows it can be quite rare,
You’ll always find the best things in pairs,
Regal trappings always trapping stares.
Puncture wound, I misbehaved, up past the stars I gaze.
IPonder my purpose when my minds a maze.
Give everything to everyone I meet,
Stood for a second then you stole my seat.
Humble people have tiny feet,
Walking around deep in sleep,
Take what you want but want what you keep.
Weigh the view, measure the sound,
Induce pursuit underground.
And a Garbo going is all I found;
Now it’s time to look around.
Vexed pure puzzlement raining down.
All about toppers, dressed as clowns…
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hi there,
well it’s a interesting lyric, maybe a little to deep for me though, i don’t understand title and don’t see how it fits and where it is at in the lyric.you have some nice ryhmes and lines but they all seem just randomly written that by themselves, sound good but put them together to assemble a song, titled “immeasureable sound”..but again, maybe there are some who see something i don’t.(but i don’t think a song is suppose to be written like that myself)..good luck, and keep writing, jim
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The rhyme scheme seems a bit obvious to me and if this is lyrics lord knows what kind of song structure you’re looking at, I certainly think you have something to say…I’m just not entirely sure you know what.
I am torn about this piece. some verses are pretty good-the first four lines, for instance, have a spectacular rhyming sequence. other lines, particularly “vexed pure puzzlement raining down” is a pretty good line, but in an actual song, it may not flow very well, and may even not be understandable in the quickness of a song.
The rhythm of a double-dutch chant is present in parts, but if you want to focus on that – needs adjusting. You have good images and ideas, but a little disjointed. You have some run-ons to fix as well. Good start.
This is great. I like the jumprope idea. It sounds like something I would have recited while double-dutching with friends in grade school. Some of the lines could have been better fitted, but for the sake of rhyme, I’m not sure how well it would have worked. I like it nontheless.
this isnt like song lyrics. it doesnt really seem to have any structure, of corse you cry songs dont have to have structure..
far to many rhymes to, you dont have to rhyme ever line, if you try and do that you’ll eventually lose what you were singing about in the first place. “Give everything to everyone I meet,
Stood for a second then you stole my seat.
Humble people have tiny feet,
Walking around deep in sleep,
Take what you want but want what you keep.” is this the chorus? is it only once?
my fav line was the last line, it sums the whole song up. i dont know what toppers is, but i know that it sounds good.
sitting in a granny flat, lol
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