Poetry / Unreal Love

Let me crown you, steal a carcass
and celebrate in the graveyard.

Let me take you to the ecstasy
and dig a hole in Mercury.

Let me kiss your blood
and travel in space on golden horses.

Let me touch your hair of heaven’s mill
and sleep as one in a giant shell.

Let me hear you sweet whisper
and sing in the moonlight with bats.

Let me freak and be free
to share spicy gifts and love bites.

Let me cut your wings of a fallen angel,
so that you can fall into an eternal abyss with me.

Let me love you blindly…

And kill you when I’m done,
and revive you when I miss.

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June 21, 2007

Orkneygirl

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Orkneygirl reviewed Version 2 - Read 100%% of the Item

“Let me hear you sweet whisper
and sing in the moonlight with bats.”  —”you” needs an “r”, it should be “your” in the poem’s context.

It’s not exactly a cheery poem, but it’s well done. Creepy, but well done. ;-)

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