Quotes / billy

As a quote, this isn’t good. As a poem, it… well, all I’m really trying to say is that you put this in the wrong forum.

Really needs to follow rules of captalization, punctuation, sentence structure, and homonyms. Good luck.

This reminds me of the song Jeanny by FALCO, including the other people coming home, Billy becoming cold….word to word…Thank you for making me remember that song , I always feel sad with these words

You need to watch your there, their, they’re (s) : “their sitting and eating” needs to be they’re (they are)
This isn’t really a quote, but it might make an amazing Haiku/Senryu if you work on it further, it’s quite a picture you painted there…

No,when one child is gone having another will not replace the one who is lost .that is if i assume corectly when ‘billy is cold’ is mean’t that he is dead.we are all individuals after all

This is not a quote. I’m not sure what you could call this. Avoid distractions like not capitalizing proper nouns, not using proper punctuation (hes vs. he’s), and use the proper words. “THEY’RE sitting and eating with THEIR families”. Lastly, throw in a couple periods.  This work is so incomplete and raw, why would you post it?

Punctuation one way or another often doesn’t matter to me. Understanding is the most important part.

Somewhat strange.

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November 20, 2007

by alone363

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You are right in the case of punctuation .”Thumbs up from me” ,But being strange…na…I find it familiar to the song Jeanny by falco, which was banned both in Australia and Germany for many years

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