Valentine’s Day
Aiming His darts at hearts unmade
By Cupid’s bow we’re roundly played.
Both large and small, both fat and lean
To some His Day is plainly mean.
Too often—There! He missed the mark!
And hit the witness! Cupid’s spark
Can boil the blood that pounds love’s ears
And make love only THINK love hears
The lilting song of a Lover’s calls
As one by one, again love falls…
Then, haply, Cupid flies away!
But gods! Not all His arrows stay!
They stick and fall! They stick and break!
This lover’s friend is such a fake!
This day of folly is a day of fools—
Who go in debt to buy love jewels.
And pierces love to think love spies
All beauty – with love’s blinded eyes!
Yet—now and then His aim is true
For me, at least, when I met you
Who loathes our Cupid’s trifling way,
Detests the gushing of this day—
Forgive this fluff of a fool amiss.
I should have said, with just one kiss
that lingers for an age or two…
Despite the dart, I’d still choose you…
From one who loves you most and best
Who took the bait of Cupid’s jest.
© 2005 Leigh McCormick
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I think this is a fantastic poem, and so so true! Very well written!
wow that is really good. i wish more guys would act like this especially mine lol. great work!
I think the exclamation points should stay. I may be wrong but I think they are in the right spots because you are making a point and they could be read a little louder when you read it outloud.
This is cute and a different approach to the Valentine’s Day mush…Hee Hee.
It made me smile.
Bravo. I was smiling almost the entire time I read this. It has a Dr. Seuss kind of feel, entertaining both my playful and serious sides. I would consider dropping some of the exclamation points. Have you tried reading this outloud? Each one of those exclamations is like a yell. I would keep the one after But gods and maybe after love’s blinded eyes. Solid ending, which is emotional without being sappy. Thanks for the read.
This is a nice piece mocking Valentine’s Day! I like it because you take normal ideals on Valentine’s day and scew them. Love is a serious thing, but your words come across soft and play a joke with it, making it funny and readable. This piece should be read after all the “Roses are Red” type poems. The only sentence that you may want to take a look at is “Forgive this fluff of a fool amiss.” This sentence made it seem that you were saying that you maybe wrong. It just is awkward to me. Good luck with it! I hope you can get this put on a Valentine’s Day Card!
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