Thanks for the fun review and the vote of confidence. Truth is I feel just as scared in front of any kind of audience.
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I’m trying to write poetry and to get better at it. It isn’t easy. Not many people will pay to read it, anyway, but I love it. They may go see a poetry jam where it’s open mic and the audience is drunk and laughing at the poets or would-be poets. That could be fun, even for me, being a poet and all. I could still laugh at myself. Ha ha.
I would stand at the mic with my little sheet of paper, because when I get nervous I forget everything and just freeze-up, turn to salt, stand curarized, unable to form sentences. So, I would look at my sheet of paper, test the sound by clearing my throat, push up my glasses, and smile and swallow, the saliva building up in my mouth. I would tell the audience I wish this piece of paper were a small book of my poetry that I was reading from and then I’m sure you’d all clap. Thunderous laughter ensues. There’s always hecklers to contend with and I just don’t know of a funny way to come back at them without escalating things. After all, it’s just a poetry reading, for God’s sake. Smile.
You would think that having a drink first, before going on would be a good idea. But, no, big mistake! One can get hung-up as they say which is when you latch onto an idea and can’t let go. You go ‘round and ‘round with this thing and you’re doing battle with it as if it is some strong, dark angel sent to fight you all night. All you end up doing is repeating what you just said and you look pretty ridiculous.
There’s guys in the audience with boots and ponytails and girls with black velvet dresses and black nail polish and girls hiding behind their bangs. And other girls like you in rectangle glasses trying to be gracious as they take the stage. Some, some succeed in getting applause.
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itacaregaucho reviewed Version 1 -
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Spiritualities and nice piece! I can not write about grammar because I’m rookie in English language, but your words are fun and in the same time make me feel like you feel!
Good job, keep writing!
Aloha!
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fiddybinkin reviewed Version 1 -
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Do it! Go read your poetry at an open mic. I’m only encouraging you to do this because I am too chicken. It’s not that I won’t find anything to say to the hecklers, it’s just that I’m too mean. I’ll say something ugly and nasty and too bad for the situations and then all of the spectators will glare at me and make me feel a burst of righteous indignation that will simmer in my sould for days. just kidding.
I know this is a blog but your writing was very descriptive and I felt like I was right there, watching you give a reading. And you know what? You were pretty good – so go do it!
Oubliette reviewed Version 1 -
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I’d never have the courage to actually read my poetry at an open mic poetry jam.
You end this a little abruptly and don’t really conclude it. I know it’s just a snapshot at an experience, but it seems a bit vague of presence, and the tense agreement has a few discrepencies.
However, as I said, I would never even have the guts to do that!
Arcaina reviewed Version 1 -
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I think you should just go and read you poetry at a coffee house or something. Maybe a drink will help, maybe not. I also like poetry, and I also am afraid of people criticism. Its a bitch when you do something just to be laughed at. But with poetry, the people who care to listen, normally do just that. And if they do laugh, it was because your poem was funny.
People who go to mic nights are pretty mature normally, which is very good. Especially if your shy. I recommend reading it aloud to your friends. Maybe with a mic, im afraid of them personally. As well as crowds, that why I recommend practice with it. I hope you well. -Seth
TheWorstRobot reviewed Version 1 -
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This is real confusing because it jumps around in tense. For instance you start with present tense, move into future, and then in the most confusing paragraph (the third) you go back to present tense, and you end with past tense. I mean the subject matter is fair enough it’s just hard to read with so many changes in tense.
March 02, 2007
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Overall, I thought this piece was ok. Not bad, per se, but not brilliant either. Would have liked to see more development and richer imagery. You got better near the end, enjoyed reading about the other attendees. A nice passage was, “with boots and ponytails and girls with black velvet dresses and black nail polish and girls hiding behind their bangs. And other girls like you in rectangle glasses trying to be gracious…” that offered the reader some nice imagery. Overall pretty good, but you definitely have to work on the content for this to be published. WOuld be curious about your poetry.
bluesfancy reviewed Version 1 -
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I think it was incredibly brave of you, to stand up in front of a crowd and pour out to them your thoughts and feelings.
I get extremely nervous just showing my poetry to one person, let alone many persons.
Hecklers? I think most people faced with that situation would want to curl up in a ball and not come out again.
If you can take all that, and still want to go and do it again, I say “Bully for you!” and “Have at it!”
You have given me, and probably many others here at Urbis, inspiration, that we might not have had, otherwise.
Thank you. :)
MizzKFizzle reviewed Version 1 -
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Ah the life of a writer! We are so underappreciated, underrecognized, underPAID! You wrote a wonderful description of yourself standing on stage before the throngs of doubters, though, I felt like I was up there with you, staring nervously into the masses. And I agree about having a drink before you take the stage…reading poetry and alcohol most certainly do not mix, especially with my verbal articulation skills :) Best of luck to you with your poetry.
Suz reviewed Version 1 -
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Reading , public speaking, heck, being the center of attention, all of these terrify me.
But you really have to be brave to READ your personal words to a crowd of strangers.
But what does fear have to offer you, but missed opportunities??
Go for It!
nickbonelli reviewed Version 1 -
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Very excellent! I can sympathize; it is very intimidating being a wanna be writer in this world of Philistines. You do an excellent job of summing up the feelings of nervousness that many experience when attempting to reveal thier art to an audience.
However, as you say, “After all, it’s just a poetry reading, for God’s sake. Smile.” Its easy to feel dejected and lose hope, but remember how almost ridiculous the event is. Poetry readings are sometimes silly little pretentious events, and its almost pretensious just wanting to be apart of one. And yet, they can be alot of fun.
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