Poetry / mating call

Mating Call

Once, in an air-conditioned classroom under the psychology building,
Nan Cohen and friends asked me to extend the length of my poems.

And thus it is written, with lines varying throughout, not exact in
length, but attempting to exact a length of two pages. But what is length,

for length varies in almost everything,
and we too are not all constant;

Ben Franklin, seeing the people’s need,
devised a way to change the length of day while keeping time constant.

Because many men question the importance of length, for it is written,
(or said), “It’s not the LENGTH that matters, but the size.” And

it’s true: a long cannon will not necessarily destroy nations. Einstein
proved this when he helped create a big bang in small packages.

However, such words of wisdom go unheeded by their main opponents, women,
who fuss about the minimum length of things like 1 minute or 6 inches.

Therefore a phenomenon was observed in the gyms of middle schools
as the length-challenged males stood in the corners waiting

for their opponents to offer some kind of truce. Perhaps truce
is not all too implausible; for we see in the early days of February

it all depends upon the length of a shadow; when a groundhog dictates to
us mortals whether we shall stay in a little longer to make sweet love.

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December 06, 2005

Yung_n_Restless

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Yung_n_Restless reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

imagine Tom Brokaw reciting this poem…the stanzas carry such a beautiful rhythm…i enjoyed reading this piece outloud to myself…

the humor and irony are great!:

“Because many men question the importance of length, for it is written,
(or said), “It’s not the LENGTH that matters, but the size.�?...”

you present these mundane things in such Biblical proportions…like an episode of Wonder Years…:)

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November 28, 2005

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Davidkeever7 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I like this its different than most, you dont get to read a lot like this one very often. Sounds like something johnny cash or jack johnson would have wrote. Theres only like one thing i dont like about it.
You seem to be too personal in this poem. needs more methaphores. But i love the substance of this work. Well done keep on writing. The world needs more of us. Ya and my poem, “The sad disguise” the poem is about death and ya it could use a little work. All of my works are drafts for my new poetry book. I enjoy reading your work though, its quite excellent! And thank you for the comments on mine.