Short Story / I'm Not Dead

Green highlights in the hair? Interesting.  Ideas? Another character needs to enter the scene that is familiar enough to  the author, gaining enough trust to either allow him/her to lead him/her out of this purgatory or dream into either a chaotic world or a peaceful one. Maybe into the world of adulthood where the young person begins to see a different reality that was lost in the younger perspective on life and be able to compare the differences in how an adult copes with the teenager’s reality and the difficulty that an adult has with a youthful perspective on life.    

An interesting start of a story.  It drags the reader into the suspence making the reader want to know more.  My advice would be to use a little more detail.  Deeper thoughts would work as well.  Keep up the good work.  I hope to read more.