Haiku/Senryu / After Truth Pushed Us Down the Stairs

thanks for the read and review :).

thanks, darling.

thanks for the review, tre. in this case…the “loss” is a good thing though ;).

thanks much for reading and reviewing this piece.

“The “we did” sounds like Yoda talking and I love that, brings ageold hairy green wisdom.  You gotta read a couple of times to clearly feel it.”

heheh…everyone’s picking up on the yoda-like lingo. i honestly didn’t even think of it like that until another reviewer pointed it out. i just have a knack for writing choppy lines in haiku, i guess…

“Where your capitals at?”

i don’t like (read: hate) capitalizing, especially in my personal writing…that shift key nonsense interrupts my flow. it wouldn’t seem to be bothersome when writing haiku…but i guess it’s just a habit now. of course, in professional writing, i would …(gag)...adapt.

” If you changed the word crimson and used critical would it change your meaning or take to another level?  Kinda gives it more militant viewpoint like science and space, considering this is about truth.”

i really like your POV on this. i read it over with “critical” and liked it. however…”crimson” helps carry along the idea of a miscarriage happening…you know…crimson-red bloody death…pretense had quite the messy exit.

i appreciate all your insightful comments.

I love it…”’yoda-like’ speech”.  I was so wrapped up in meaning I didn’t even hear that until I read this review.  Now I’m laughing…but it doesn’t effect the read for me.  But damn, that’s a funny observation, Cavol.

thanks for the nice review, cavol.

“There is still one thing that I didn’t get which was the significance of “truth”. I don’t know what truth is a metaphor for but it does not matter at this point.”

truth here symbolizes something you can’t escape. in this case, it was the ever-lurking monster that had had enough …enough of the bullshit, the phoniness…so he crept up from behind to attack, to end this tired feigned relationship that was going nowhere fast, hence the crimson mass of pretense in the toilet…that was truth putting one big lie out of its misery…hope that clears some stuff up for you. if not…i don’t know what else to say lol.

“yoda-like” speech…classic. thank you…haha…yeah, some of my haiku lines can be a lil choppy…but i digs that…that’s just how they come to me. xo

Now…read the whole damn thing in a Yoda voice.  I love it.  And now I’m picturing Yoda pushing the Misses down the stairs to abort an unwanted pregnancy.  Not physically pushing her, using his Jedi mind powers…so he can deny responsibility.  Seriously…I’m laughing hard right now.  And it’s not a funny poem…but thanks to Cavol, I won’t be able to read it the same again, ever.

“Not physically pushing her, using his Jedi mind powers…so he can deny responsibility.”

hahahaha…

ah well, a lil laughter never hurt anyone.

And it doesn’t stop there…now I’m envisioning Yoda impregnanting some other muppet.  Muppet porn…you think there might be a market for something like that…hardcore puppet sex?

hell fucking yeah lol. if people can jack off (& climax) to pokemon-esque anime gangbangs (reference: hentai porn)...then i’m sure yoda’s dirty jagged sex talk would overly excite them into nuttiness (pun intended)...yoda would be the new ron jeremy.

“urm…pussy not yours! owner i am. who’s your JEDI master?“

Damn…I think we have a movie concept.  I’m sure Jim Hensen’s company would be all over it.  Though…I’m left wondering if Yoda wouldn’t be doing gay porn…he seems awful fond of his “light sabre”.

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hilarious.

and now i’m laughing harder…cause i’m thinking about yoda playing “swords” with his light sabre….smashing that thing into jedi rod…like how men smashed their GI joes together as a kid. (SLAP, SLAP, SLAP!) no…i don’t think that’d sell :( at all…we need to lock yoda in a room with a bunch of miss piggy clones….let’s see how he handles all that voluptuous muppet meat.

Ummm….miss piggy…wait, why am I getting aroused by images of Yoda with miss piggy…many miss piggys…must sleep….must seek redemption from the dark lord for these most disturbed thoughts.

ahahaha….miss piggy has huge porky titties :).

I know…it’s been too long since I’ve been laid if I’m finding hand puppets a turn on.  God…hand puppets.  Shoot me please, won’t you?  That or mercy fuck me.

why the hell are we still up? we should shoot each other. we’ve been up all night…that’s about 10-15 orgasms that’ll never ever be now. because of us. fuck, morning is here. (slowly slides back into cave…)

ooh wait….

slides…slowly…cock into cunt.

insomnia blows…soporific insanity…could’ve been laid…it’s a shame i still have on my panties

poor cavol. he has no idea what he started…all because of one cool quip.

sleep, must i soon!!

Sleep…I no longer have that capacity…reprogrammed my mind permanently with cocaine not all that long ago, and now even though I’m “clean”...I still only sleep every few days, or a quick half-hour or hour nap here and there.  It’s positively insane.

And if you could have been laid during all this time…you’re fucking crazier than I am.  I at least have an excuse…I only have my cats here with me, and well, I’m sparing them.

I must get to work on my Ms. Piggy hand-puppet…she will satisfy my needs for puppet beastiality.  Yes…Ms. Piggy must I pork.  Show her the ways of the force, I must.

no matter how we individually got to this road…we’re both zombies running around in circles now. the “prescription med” i take causes me to be restless as fuck…that’s why i haven’t slept in like…3 days, literally….i just keep going and going and going…little miss energizer bunny here…with another energized pink bunny not even a foot away from me….yes, she entertains on those lonely, silent nights…i like how her “bzzzzzzzz” sounds permeates the air.

puppet beastiality…oh yes, i’m sure there’s a world of sickos who’d enjoy watching you poke miss piggy’s plush pork pussy. just PLEASE put duct tape over her mouth…just so you don’t think you’re fucking louis armstrong.

I used to hang with a couple strippers who swore to me that the “bunny” thing…a specific model, was god’s gift to women.

My God, what the hell did I start here? lol Muppet sex, gay-gang bangs, hentia an fisting? ok maybe not fisting but something tells me that the 2 of you would have gotten there.

thanks, hun. appreciate the comments.