Haiku/Senryu / 25 Holiday Haiku

I’m not sure if this was meant to be funny, I suppose it was to some degree. I got more of a feeling of resentment and a desire to expose the hypocracy and materialism of modern society. Nicely written.

I wrote lyrics like this one year.  Great job.  I  have friends that will love this.  So many good parts – Macy’s parade, “millions of dead trees” and those stupid bells are my favorites.  What’s your next subject?

You have a couple of really good haiku here. 1-6 are fresh good form and true. There are some that are different versions of what you all ready wrote. And the rest seem a  bit forced. But as a whole it’s a great idea and pretty well done. It’s hard to do this many haiku in a theme and not  end up being a repeat or just plain boring so I give you high marks for your effort and the first six haiku’s.

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December 25, 2006

by poet_from_hell

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you can add another haiku today

Godfather of soul
James Brown has died on this day
soulful chrismas mourn

December 25, 2006

by VioletL

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great tribute and pun.  He will be missed and remembered.

December 25, 2006

by onlywish

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One haiku truly sad haiku. I agree with VoilettL  Thank you.

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Rofl
I would prefer an S on celebrate
Wits’ end needs an apostrophe.
humbug is, I think, one word

Hysterical piece
not hating the holiday
but what it now is

this is great!  very honest and funny.

This is very good. I liked every verse but my favorite was the largest parade advertisement in disguise. I gave this a 9

They were well written haikus, but I hate to see you are not in the Christmas spirit.  Christmas isn’t just about these things, it’s also about families being together, laughing, and love.  But good job on the haikus.  One that I probably agreed with the most was the one about the Salvation Army.  Those bells can get annoying, can’t they?  I liked the ones towards the middle best.

Weather getting cold
children dream of snow fall
winter wonderland

Making snow angels
sledding down the biggest hill
having snowball war

Carolers singing
visiting neighborhood streets
bringing joy with them

If you could make more like that, you could have haikus that were brighter and happier.  But I do like how you put your own personal view, and the view of so many others, into these haikus.   Good Job!

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December 21, 2006

by poet_from_hell

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I hate xmas in case you didn’t guess.
I am the real scrooge and grinch rolled up into one.
it’s a stupid commercial holiday that has no point, it doesn’t bring people together and it no longer has any religious meaning.

thanks for the comments about my haiku, they aren’t as easy as one would think, at least well crafted ones are hard to do.

Check out the ones about my friends cat entitled, The best pussy,
you’ll like those.

March 24, 2007

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lol ok I will

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I love it!

Bah humbug is right!

You are a haiku master, I taught you well

Great set of Haikus. I enjoyed how you were able to point out how the corruption of the holidays have destorted the way things were before and how the true meaning of Christmas has been forgotten. Great job. Though, I personally think it would be cool to add something about how things are changin’ to political correctness…like Seasons Greatings and Happy Holdiays…all that crap. Well anyways, loved the haikus made me laugh. Keep writting such haikus they’re fun to read.

Not a bad group of haiku at all, a few were very good. But as to making people laugh, it does not come across as funny, simply bitter, focusing only on the negative, no positives except, oddly enough, no smartass remark about the carolers bringing joy and the snow activities.. The stolen country line is naive… every country has been stolen at some point, I mean really. I respect that everyone is entitled to an opinion, so don’t take my opposing opinion like a barb.

That being said, I actually liked the work, the linking of haikus, though there could have been more bleed between “stanzas”.

By the way, I don’t like Christmas either, but “It’s a Wonderful Life” is one of the best ever.