Poetry / Dragonfly Dreams

Dragon circled the earth by night
Dropping dreams along his path
Forming ripples in known reality
With illusion, he altered the truth of sight.

He lit the sky with his breath of fire,
In guiding patterns for all to see.
Tiny specs of brilliant beams
To hang forever on invisible wire.

The air stirred through his sparkling scales
Filling the Earth with echoed melody.
Light of fire to drops of rain reflected
With colors too vibrant to pale.

His power of enchantment and insight grew
To transcending change of thought and form
Till pride caught him in his own veneer
When challenged to change his shape to new.

Dragon writhed in his new-found form;
Unable to escape his own illusion.
As he thrashed about, his scales burst forth
Raining down to earth in a radiant swarm.

Each scale a Dragonfly with nothing to hide
Is all that is left of Dragon
Skimming the water, it hovers on air
And warns of the perils of succumbing to pride.

Dragonfly guides us to truth through dreams
On wings that illuminate our lives to transform.
Reminding our gifts come from the Creator
And that life is never the same as it seems.

You need to log in to urbis or create an urbis account to review this writing.

Reviews

December 09, 2007

sharkseek

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
157	90.0% (10 votes)	18.3%

personal info reviewer stats

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
53	F	Ponca City, OK	November 02

sharkseek reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I’ve given very few 10’s in my reviews, but this has certainly earned one. This is perfect. You’ve captured the essence of my favorite beast, and created a wonderful tale of how a dragonfly came to be. I can find no fault in grammar, nor does any part of your descriptive imagery cause pause or stumble to me as a reader. Thanks for a terrific piece which i will certainly add to my faves! Write on!

add/view comments (0)

November 01, 2006

Butifl_Smile

No. of Reviews	Overall Quality	Comment Followup
56	100.0% (5 votes)	13.8%

REVIEW QUALITY: 100.0%(1 vote ) personal info reviewer stats

Age	Gender	Location	Last Login
32	F	New Cumberland, PA	July 11

Butifl_Smile reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I loved this poem!
But then I’m a girl who believes in fairy tales and the unknown :)

This is the only part of the entire poem which stopped me though.

“Each scale a Dragonfly with nothing to hide
Is all that is left of Dragon”.
Mainly that second line, it doesn’t quite fit into the rest of that stanza. Maybe if it’s re-worded it would work a bit better.

Other then that, you have a lovely, imaginative piece here :)
~Ange