Poetry / Not So Much

If I could change color
would you love me forever?
Would you love me like a god
who once was just your man?
Not “color” as in “skin tone”
like Caucasian, Asian, African…
Not color like a tattoo,
or a sunburn or a tan.
But like an octopus or chameleon
a magic paint-job from within me
washing outward like a wave
of purple, green or gold?

If I was a mountain
would you love me forever?
If I was a mountain
would you love me like the land?
A racial memory, family history,
roots incarnate. Rock and timber.
The place
where sky meets water
where we finally
make our stand?

If I was a mirror
would you love me forever?
If I whispered, “You are lovely,”
would you love me like a song?
If every time you faced me
you saw everything as I see it;
you’d see colors ever changing,
moutains, angels, sky and god.

I have days; my life is measured,
I can give you dawn to sunset.
I have hands; and they can carve
a place for comfort, a place to sleep.
I have words and they are only
breath on breath
the scratch of spirits.
There is nothing in the ink
to make your dreams
any less deep.

I am sorry
days aren’t colors.
Hands aren’t mountains.
Words aren’t mirrors.

I am sorry,
I am sorry,
I am sorry,

I’m
not
god.

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January 12, 2007

Deleted User

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This was excellent. If this were an apology, it would be a great one.  I hope who ever it was forgave you for what ever it was that you did. You have a beautiful way that you use your words, especially in this poem.  My favorite part which to me was genius is, “If I was a mountain
would you love me like the land?” There is something about it that appeals to me. I envision a mountain the highest of high, perhaps what you were once perceived as, and then come to find that you are human, you bleed, and you heal.  Great sense of imagery.  Nice write.

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October 13, 2006

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bor1 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I like ie well done

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September 24, 2006

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Spectacular_Views reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Absolutely perfect. I can’t find anything wrong with it at all. I loved the ending the best. Very good poem.

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September 24, 2006

Stewbacca

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Stewbacca reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I liked this. Seems very personally and directed towards women who want too much.

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