Poetry / Scars
Scars
By
Kelsey
They say all heals in time
They say wounds fix themselves
But what they dont say
They dont say there will always be a scar
Always be proof that something did happen
Visible scars remind you of physical pain
But there are scars no one can see
Unless they look into your eyes
Your eyes are the doors to your heart
And the doors to your soul
In a persons eyes you can see their pain
Their love
Their past
Their inner scars
Though the scars hurt
Physical and emotional
They make you, you
Regret things all you want
Wish you were never hurt
Wish you never hurt someone else
But by the time they heal and the scar is left
It will make them and you better for it
They say all heals in time
They say wounds fix themselves
But they dont speak of the scars
The scars in your heart
The scars on your skin
Both proof of a war waged within
Either within yourself or around you
Both proof of what youve been through
Sure some scars mean nothing
But still each scar
Each wound
Each painful moment
Everything
Has a story behind it
My scars stories are mostly emotional
Pain, love, death
Been there done that
It gets boring
It gets old
Being constantly reminded by the people around you
The ones who havent lost a loved one to death
The ones who have never truly loved and lost
The ones who have yet to see lifes bad side
I could say I envy their innocence but I dont
They arent luck
They arent prepared
I remember my first heart break hurt like hell
But I was younger
It prepared my heart
Got me ready for the cruel world
I dont regret my scars
But I am not proud of them
This world is about balance
Innocence is ignorance
Experience is knowledge
Knowledge is power
At times the world wants peace
But what would peace do for us?
Peace wouldnt let us evolve
Peace wouldnt let us move on
Others want a world of war
War on its own would bring chaos
Would bring hell
Thats why scars though painful help.
They have just enough chaos and pain
To allow us to evolve
But yet enough good to remember
To remember our humanity
They say time heals all
They say every wound shall heal
But they do not speak of our scars
Scars long forgotten
Scars recently made
Scars of truth yet no justice prevailed
Scars of death
Scars of Pain
Scars of war
Scars of love
Scars of loss
Scars make us remember
Scars make us see
Scars tell stories that we cannot
Scars speak the truth where we are to scared
Scars tell all that will listen, our true feelings
Life isnt all about school, smarts, money
Its about progressing
Its about becoming a better version of ourselves
School makes us smarter
Smarts get us money
Money makes us happy but not better
Seeing the true version of life
That by itself makes us better
Life isnt all puppy dogs and flowers
Life isnt all pain and death
It is a balance of both
And if you cannot accept that
Then again
Innocence is Ignorance
They all say time heals
But they dont tell you what is left
A scar is left behind
To remind
To define
To show who you are
To prove
To disprove
To accept
To reject
Everything youve done in life
Everything you say youve done
Can be read off of you
Youre skin proves the pain
Youre skin proves the war
But youre eyes prove the story
Your eyes prove it all with the scars left on your soul
Left on your heart
Each scar tells a story
Loud
Proud
And True
Of a time in your life
Of Happiness
Of Pain
Of Death
Of Loss
Of Love
Of Innocence
Of Inner Destruction
Of Rebuilding Your Heart
Some Scars dont ever fully heal
Some Scars make a wall around your heart
Why?
Because thats how your journey through life is
You live
You Learn
You love
You lose
You cry
You fight
You Move On
Then you die
Sometimes literally
Sometimes figuratively
But which is worse?
Dieing
Or Being dead on the inside
Though dieing on the inside
Will eventually heal it will hurt for weeks
Months
Maybe even years
No one knows what on the other side
But in my opinion
Your soul returns to earth
Containing the scars of every life you lived before
Making you better for yourself
Making you evolve
Making you brighter
So in truth are scars painful?
Yes
But you cant stop from getting hurt
No matter what
You can hurt from loneliness
From Loss
From Death
From Love
From Urges
From Envy
From Everything
So what stories do your scars tell?
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It was nice to see such passion, but you kind of contradict yourself. you say that you need balance and imply that scars kind of make you who you are, but said that you are ashamed of yours. Don’t be! The events in your life shape who you are and what you have become. you must embrase them with all the power that you hold in your work. Because of how it was set up, I found it hard not to just skim over some stuff, so maybe work on that a little.
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the writing has a lot of maturation to do. i know you warned of the repetition, but it was overbearing. it’s a good start for a budding poet, but strive to notice things everyday in a different light and then write about it. this way, you have fresh images, and good descriptions, original emotions. expand your writing mind/world. hope that helps.
I really like the way the poem compares something physical to something emotional. It provides a great way to understand the emotional bit. One way to strengthen this connection is to provide some type of central image, i.e. of a scar, of what types of pain cause which types of scars.
Also, I would suggest cutting the peice a bit. As is, some of the meaning gets lost among all the words, especially the vauge concepts, such as ignorance and inocence.
I suggest you try and present your ideas about “the secret messages of scars” and physical vs. emotional scars in a more concrete and succinct way.
Very nice analogy between the scarring of the mind and the scarring of the body.
Becuase of the repetition of words, the shape of the poem is very interesting. I would like to see this poem printed out on a very long piece of paper. While my understanding of abstract terms such as “loss,” “paint,” “love” may vary from yours and the words may evoke different, if any, images in reading, I do enjoy the succinctness of the lines, and your use of short words rather than long descriptions.
this is good i think ocasionally you stray from your topic but it seems like you were in a time of confusion amongst your pain? thats just how i perseved it. i do like the repetativeness of those first two lines throughout the piece but i think all the repetativeness of one single word so many times is a little much…just my opinion i don’t believe in changing what you’ve written when its your feelings so thats just my opinion on the piece
They dont say there will always be a scar
Perhaps try: Is that life will come with its scars
Your eyes are the doors to your heart
And the doors to your soul
If its a doorway to one can it be a doorway to both? Perhaps try: Your eyes the doorway to your heart
And a passageway to your soul
Still gets the same meaning but breaks up the repeating. I believe that this is a great start to a good poem. I believe you will turn the reader away unless you clean up the repetivness. Good luck and let me know if I can help.
This is a very interesting piece of work. It is so true and written very well. There are a few small changes I would make. I would change to though the scars hurt physically and emotionally they make you.I want to emphasize this is very good insight and a great job at putting it into words. I also like the way you have listed rather than just wrote paragraphs. I can see everyone that reads this sitting down with paper and pen to write what their scars tell.
“Your eyes are the doors to your heart
And the doors to your soul” I like this line the most and feel that it is 100% true. I do think its a bit too repetitive. I know you did mention that you were aware of that. However, I got a sense of more frustration than pain necessarily. Not sure if that was meant to be but that was my interpretation.
Excellent although its a massive piece of work you would think this would bore you with repatitve themese coming and going but it actually grabs you and keeps your attention while feeding you with information I found myself entertained and enjoying the work.
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