Poetry / Valhalla Awaits

Valhalla Awaits

I fear not what awaits on the other side,
For I am a Soldier and I know.

Many are the eye that look toward me,
Faces of those who have passed before,
Not judging, for they have been there also.

On feathered wings of resplendent light,
I will be carried to the Soldiers paradise.
By beauties with golden hair and gleaming swords
Streaming through the air, guiding my soul.

“Lo, he comes,” is the cry that arises.
“Lo, here I am,” is the cry I return.
And tears fall for those left behind,
For they don’t know the beauty and camaraderie
That awaits the Soldier in Valhalla.

Never again to feel pain of sword or bullet passed,
Or to feel hunger while waiting on battle,
Never again to feel worry for those on the front line,
Or to feel betrayed by conscience.

I can now join my brothers and sisters
Who have fought in numerous fights and countless wars,
Those that know what a Soldier is about.

I need not fear what awaits on the other side,
For I am a Soldier and I know.

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July 19, 2008

motherjungle

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motherjungle reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Until words hit the paper, we never know. I could relate to this as my brother was in army for 20 years. I like the whole theme of it, what lacks for me is more of a visual bursting of the imagery. If you dive more into the guts of these thoughts, I think it would come more alive. At this moment I can’t wrap my hands around it and feel all that I sense is there. For example: on feathered wings of resplendent light—I am miss what this means and keeps me distant. I had to read it twice. That’s a signal to me to take a second look. Good luck. I really like the subject matter.

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July 19, 2008

by AlphaWriter

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Well for me going back to write it is not an option. I wrote it after my own brother, a green beret, died and I couldn’t bring myself to change it if I wanted too since it is now on his headstone. I could sit here and justify why the replendent light line is in there, but you either get it, or you don’t. Thanks for the review though, I really appreciate the feedback

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