Poetry / Thin Line

I think the use of the questions in the middle of the poem is entirely unnecessary. It’s not effective and just as distracting as the capitilazation of the words, “genuis”, “insane” and “all”. Also, I think the repetition of your lines “The prodigies seek solutions to the horrors of this world/While the insane hear the horror’s voices” and the last lines, “Genius-for seeking… etc” is way too redundant, especially for a piece this short.

Truthfully, I think the entire poem borders on cliche and doesn’t offer anything new to the reader. You offer up that people have said “there’s a thin line” between genuis and insanity, but that’s a bit trite, don’t you think? If other people have said that, you should consider exploring it in a different way. You’ve taken one idea and just reworded it throughout the poem, instead of offering some refreshing or innovative insight.

while i enjoy the structure of this piece
i wonder whether it is a poem.
good poetry is made up of intelligent metaphors and creative ambiguousness.

this piece has neither and it seems it would work better as an essay, or prose piece.

I really like this. It’s extremely creative and insightful. Very good work, no wonder it’s going to be in that Poetry book. Good job.