Poetry / Nonsense...

well, “Miss Meyers,” if that is in fact your real name…
you will find that i am not so easily disuaded.
your attempts to distend this conjuncture will have irrevocable consentaneous affects…
antecedently there was thought…
thought must be succeeded with action…
action is the primogenitor of all that can and will be…
which brings me back to you, “Miss Meyers,” if that is in fact your real name…
because without thought action will never be…
and if action is not, then effect will never be either…
ergo, how can the causatum of our inevitable coalescence occur without
first submitting to an existentialistic notion that this pivotal ajoining has
a ramification beyond our comprehention …?
ergo, how can we coalesce in an extemporaneous and relatively fervent exchange
without first establishing an edwin of adoration…?

   ...hence, my persistence…

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October 30, 2005

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Interesting piece. I couldn’t quite grasp what was going on here. For me, this was a difficult read because of the punctuation, sentence structure … and then at times, strings of words that just didn’t seem to fit in this poem.

What were you trying to do? What were you trying to accomplish here or get the reader to see? Just my thoughts.

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November 08, 2005

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cabaretic: i don’t mean to make the audience feel the fool or to play “gotcha”... and the point is not to through pricey words around… :)

well, to tell you all the truth, this lil ditty started out as a joke: to say something without really saying anything i suppose… but besides that i wanted it to feel like a “first date”. i wanted to convey the ackward staging of the first meeting, the desire and reluctance, the sometimes forced and contrived moments of an often futile first impression… but sometimes it works.. with the right communication, the right interpretation and a lil compromise a match can be made… but, judging by the feedback i guess i didn’t achieve that… all well, another time perhaps…

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