Lyrics / cherryhole

I enjoyed reading this. However, what is a “cherryhole”?

she’s like lightning hitting a church bell….

great imagery!

I really like it.

This line…

and i am the end where your beginnings have died

might be the best cyrptic and meaningful line.

Great

i love the lines this is the revolution/ i am the omega where your alpha resides/ and i am the end where your beginnings have died. you used awesome vivid imagery. there are some delightful phrases such as “moral compass”  and “rested my head on a concrete cushion.” i’d be interested in hearing how this transmogrifies when sung aloud; just textually it’s a very powerful piece.

I would love to hear this outloud – I can tell it has one helluva beat – I also like the words you use – Alpha/Omega, concrete cushion etc… good job!

I usually prefer lyrics that rhyme, but yours managed to keep my attention with its vivid imagery and good rhythm.  You might want to use proper capitalization where it belongs; its absence doesn’t detract from a work but it does make it look prettier…  Other than that it really is a beautiful song and I can’t find anything wrong with it.  Nice job :).

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March 16, 2006

by irrevolute

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i’m not sure i understand what you mean by “proper capitalization”
for one thing, this is a song lyrics, and none of my song lyrics contain any capitals, as a rule… i feel it breaks up the natural rhythm applied to the words by the music.
i’m pleased you liked the lyrics, if you would like to hear a sample to help you hear how the lack of rhyme functions metrically, then message me and i can direct you to an audio sample.

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