Thanks Jalubcarrey, it was really a most- needed examination. I had been a little worried that no one has questioned the write, here as well at other places.
To put it in a nutshell, I thought of Gilda as being the personification of life. And the ending lines, which otherwise feel very slandering, are instead the grudging admiration by death.. that though men prefer to “sleep with Gilda”, they wake up with me. In other ways.. a transition occurs from a tangible life.. to an intabgible death. Or a transition from happy illusions to harsh reality.
I agree with you about the posies bit completely. It did confuse children with posies; I meant the children to sputter like balloons.. children meaning all of us, who are children to mother life. The sputtering bit has been wrongly placed, thanks for the valuable insight.
I did mean rudy finger marks though.. a reference to love bites.. bleeding in passion. That stanza is has a little carnal overture, as do phases of life herself.
Finally, thanks SO much for taking time to read it. You asked questions that will always be most satisfying, to any writer.
God Bless !
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