Poetry / Changing Seasons (Analysis)
IN THE SPRING I LAUGHED AND RAN THROUGH THE GRASS SMELLING THE EARTHY SMELL OF NEW LIFE. THE BIRDS CHIRPED AND THE JOY I FELT WAS OVERPOWERING. I KNEW IT ALL AND I DID NOT CARE WHO THOUGHT DIFFERENT. I LEARNED NEW THINGS AND I HAD IT ALL IN FRONT OF ME TO DISCOVER.
IN THE SUMMER I PLAYED WITH FRIENDS AND LEARNED YET MORE. THERE WERE GAMES AND EXPERIENCES THAT WERE ONCE IN A LIFETIME. I FOUND LOVE AND IT WAS A POWERFUL THING THAT RULED MY HEART FOR THE WHOLE SEASON. I WAS LOST IN THE BEAUTY AND SPLENDOR OF IT.
IN THE FALL THINGS SLOWED DOWN AND YET I LEARNED MORE. THE TREES TURNED GOLDEN AND LOVE RAN AWAY. I SAW THE EMPTINESS AHEAD AND I KNEW THINGS WOULD BE DIFFERENT. I KNEW I WOULD BE DIFFERENT. IT WAS AN INEVITABLE CHANGE THAT EVERYONE WOULD GO THROUGH.
IN THE WINTER I LEARNED MY MOST PRIZED LESSONS AND SAW THE WORLD HOW IT TRULY WAS. A GRAY AND EMPTY THING WITH SKELETAL REMAINS OF TREES LINING EVERY STREET. THE PLACES AND FACES OF SPRING AND SUMMER WERE FADING AS A DISTANT MEMORY FADES. AT THE END OF WINTER I CLOSED MY EYES AND KNEW THAT THE END HAD COME.
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I really really love this one! I think that how you described the changes, and described the seasons so well. I think one thing you can improve on is HOW you learned and WHAT you learned. Overall, I thought it was great and can’t wait to see how you improve.
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Add comma in first line after spring. Add ly to different in third line. Second Stanza, add comma after friends before and. Also a comma after love and before and. Fourth stanza comma after winter before I. YOu might want to take it out of all caps and divide into more clear lines. Overall good job.
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