Poetry / Why My Homies Cry
Keep your heads up homies you're not at all alone.
Dry your eyes of them tears, don't allow a weakness to be shown.
I've alwayz asked myself, why do we do the things we do?
Getting ourselves in these situations, I've been through what you're going through.
Look at my brother Benny, doing time for a mouth that can't stay shut.
Having everyting on the outside, but on the inside being messed up.
I know how you feel and hurt, to look from the inside out.
Having no one on the other side to give you the benefit of the doubt.
Then look at my lil brother C.L.G fighting a viscous to get free.
That the court system is playing with my little brother, always preying on the weak.
I understand how it hurts inside having no one on yourside.
Doing time with no viso and phone calls, being forgotten by the outside.
Now check out my manito Jon Jon going to trial to get back time.
Wanting to go home to his mother to dry up the tears that she's cried.
I've been through these struggles that is being locked up behind bars.
Lieing in bed cause you can't sleep looking out the window for wishing stars.
Dry your eyes my brothers cause soon it'll be your time.
Don't give up on the outside, cause this is "Why My Homies Cry."
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I really felt connected to these young men’s struggles. Your writing made them ‘flesh and bones’ and a lot of heart. I understand what you mean by asking them not to cry after the second read. You want them to move past their struggles, and overcome.
I think this is written very well for music, spoken word, or literary poetry. Myabe, I can see it being more powerful if a specific incident is described for each person to connect the audience to their story more. We need more visual imagery, metaphors, or concrete examples for example to touch upon our hearts more. We don’t want to feel vague in our sympathies, but more grounded in feeling for the characters, and drawn to them. If you don’t want to focus on the negative, which I can fully understand, create a vision of them overcoming.
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