Poetry / A Heartfelt Victory
A scene very serene, a moment to remember
A cold winter’s night, a dance in December
A touch of joy, a moment of delight
A panorama so beautiful, a starry night vividly bright
The joy of a connection between two souls
A love long forsake once again made whole
Two bloodlines intertwined a perfect DNA strand
The rebirth of a flame upon an ocean’s wet sand
A desire that transpired inside the depths of a mind
In the wakefulness of a dream, a reality surely blind
A concealed affection; the reflection of a heart’s emotion
The beauty of a love never lost, an unbreakable devotion
Two souls that longed forever
Knowing deep-down one day they’d be together
The key to a heart and the unlocking of a chest
The perils of love, truly the ultimate test
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Very well done, I see no problems besides one that is only technical.
“A love long forsake once again made whole” how about “A love song forsaken once again made it whole” or “make it whole”, I don’t want to impose though, just an idea.
I’ll be reading you, peace.
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oh nooooooooooooo … someone is in love …lol ; can’t wait til the absence of love wends , the heart shall truly open its flood gates … ok ok ok getting serious ; like ive stated prior , you youth will blossom delightfully if pursued , keep writing plz ; very nicely crafted and your word choice gives the poem strength ; those of us who are romantics , will delve deeply into love poetry n such , however , don’t be discouraged by those who do not , and give unlikable critiques … sublime work young lad !!!
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