Thank you so much.
Lyrics / A World is a Wonderful Thing to Jump Off Of
I'm confidented in my consequentedness
to be at my before time was
with a new hat on.
do you have any magic on you?
discrepancies are discouraging
and dynamite their only doctor
Help me, help me, natural wonder!
lovely,
someone’s secret is everybody's know about and
special paid attention to- Dear boy:
Dear boy, dear boy, dear boy,
the city looks like London
don't lift a finger,
or push a button,
don't move a muscle,
clear up your blunder-
Come abouts and laughed to's are priceless!
Vo Vohnst, du? Como talley vu?
Do you do some do stuff? I do too.
I saw a little bird and the birdie said
"hey man, whachoo doin, then?"
I said "prayin for rain, to clean up the stain"
he said "okay", and it was time to scat
I said "hey bird, don't fly away"
but do you know what he did anyway?
He flewed riiight away
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cooljim102055 reviewed Version 1 -
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hi there,
very entertaining and amusing..i luv the title…seems a bit tough to put music to but anything is possible..(because the meter seems so different throughout)..i do like the lodon/thunder ryhme but it also needs more consistent rhymes throughout to make it more memorable and catchy,,,not to mention easier to sing…which is also why big words like you used in the first lines and a few throughout are also hard to sing to in a conventional song pattern,,,ok, i yapped enough…a little rewrite and you may have something here…hope to read it again…hope i helped more than hurt
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Trina reviewed Version 1 -
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Interesting. I guess you know that there are words that don’t exist in here…like the entire first stanza. It is sort of rhythmical but for this one I think I would have to hear some music to give it the love it deserves. I do LOVE ”Praying for the rain to clear up the stain” That was cool.
natalie272 reviewed Version 1 -
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You’ve got some crazy stuff going on here, but I like it. Although I think these phrases are incorrect ‘Vo Vohnst, du? Como talley vu?’ but maybe thats what you’re going for. Keep writing, I can see there is some talent hidden behind those spontaneous, sporadic and surreal lyrics.
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