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Poetry / Halo
Halo’s of gossamer colors
wrapped themselves around my moon
belying the faint darkness
creeping skyward from the horizon.
I float restlessly on
the gentle waves with a heart full of love
waiting patiently for the fullness
of her beauty to be revealed.
The creeping darkness
swells quietly, stealthily, with evil intent
Climbing higher in the sky
on the distant horizon.
How beautiful are the colors
that stir my heart with the
passion of years of lost love
creating a yearning that is barely endured.
And the roiling clouds
dark in their destructive power
raise fear at the edges of my love
as they climb menacingly
My eyes caress the nakedness
reflected in the filtered light,
the blue aura that softly highlights
the surrounding night
Still the black clouds
move steadily higher, closer
threatening the warming beauty
of the glowing orb.
And quietly my heart takes on the
cold of the dark and icy night
forever damning me to loneliness.
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I adore writers that can paint a picture to the readers.
I adore this piece of work.
genius.
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This is a somber but soft poem. I know i’m interpreting completely different from how u mean the poem to be but it made me think of the sea and a long voyage at night. I enjoy sailing and I must say the images I got from this poem brought me back to many nights at sea. The form is solid and the poem ands with the right mood. I can’t think of any criticism other it may be shortened a bit but thats just me. My favorite line is the first:”Halo’s of gossamer colors
wrapped themselves around my moon”. well done.
def enjoyed reading this poem. in my eyes it is fine the way it is. def a poem i can relate too. if i am understanding it right but i believe it is about losing love yet still hopeing that love returns to u. not really gonna sit here and critique…cause who am i lol..
Okays, as far as entertaining and amusing…not so much. This felt like a SERIOUS poem, not an “amusing” one. But it was beautifully written!
I can visualize the coming storm as the cloud darken the horizon and give fair warning with the haloed moon. The gust of cold air is a nice touch at the end. I could feel the approaching tempest in the relationship.
i liked the analogies with light, heat, and the contrast with the icy dark night.
I would have liked to see more detail and descriptive words that were more original.
overall I liked the poem and I will look for more from you.
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