Poetry / My Love Is Not (Analysis)

My love is not for the skeptical
for the terminally unimpressible
My love is not for the jaded
for the ones who like the world segregated

my love is not for the lovers of money
for those who think my pain is funny
my love is not for those who don't
for those who can't or for those who won't

My love is not for gangsta bytches
that only love thugs with whips and switches
my love is not for the material girl
for those who choose their fathers world

My love is not for the weak
for those who act hard but are too soft to speak
my love is not for the imitator
for those who can't see the visibilificator

My love is not for the fake
for those who can't create
My love is not for anything untrue...
my love is for you...

 

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JBShadowrose avatar General Stranger

July 07, 2009

JBShadowrose

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JBShadowrose reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

This piece was simple and to the point. Sometimes, that’s all you need for a poem. You said exactly what you needed and wanted to say, were honest and straight foreword, and chose a wonderful last stanza to sum it all up. However, this was my favorite:

“my love is not for those who don’t
for those who can’t or for those who won’t”

Wonderful choice of simplicity. I really like your style, and hope to see more from you. Good luck in the future!

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