Haiku/Senryu / Been There

I think the haiku itself is perfect in all ways except spelling(tat?)and you have zero punctuation and capitalization. You really do need to add that in there. It is a great haiku but it goes off topic each line and what does it have to do with the title Been There? Just try to work on it a little and it will be even better.

First off i belive the common urbis user does not know the meaning of “tat” so, if at all possible i suggest you use a different word. “scarelts greens” contradict one another. Scarlett and green are two verry differnt colors. Other wise, great Haiku.

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November 18, 2009

by onlywish

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Thank you for your review. The use of “scarlets greens” Does contradict one another.  The very reason I wrote it for.

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