Poetry / Something Majic

He is a man, I am a woman but together we become something majic.

I try to believe he can be mine and that it won't end trajic.

I start dreaming the imposssable and hungering to make it come true.

This is all so new that I'm not sure what I should do.

I feel his breath labored and hot on my neck as we embrace.

I tremble and sigh for the sweet kisses I long to taste.

A fever grows within me and I am in bliss.

Every minute apsart from him , he is deeply missed.

He doesn't know how he could cause me so much pain.

I try to hide the fear that hit me again and again.

It's hard to believe that this is true.

I had all but given up on finding a love like you.

Then you wrap me in your arms and I am content.

This feels like something that has always been ment.

And when I gaze into those warm born eyes.

I feel a love that takes me totally by surprise.

Our gentle kisses that build into a hungered passion.

As we melt into one another in a frenzied fashion.

One fleeting weekend, two steamy nights.

Now somehow things have changed and all feels right.

I want to make you tremble, I want to make you smile.

I want to you to be with me for a long long while.

When our lips touch and our hearts beat together.

We create a majic that can live forever...

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June 15, 2009

jadedpoet

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jadedpoet reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Hello Vicky,

Yup, some tuning is needed as you slip back and forth in tenses, a common boo boo. Your sentiment is well staged, along with your veiled passions and lust. Trust enters this picture as well. I think it is a good piece that with some grammar and spell checks (magic) along with correcting the past, current tense issues you have done well. Nicely done! me…