Limericks / Dont try to be Cool
There once was a boy named Jake,
Who all of the girls thought were fake,
He tried to be cool
But got pushed in a pool
And never again did he wake
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Limericks are supposed to be bawdy. This one doesn’t appear to have that quality. Limericks are supposed to have a syllable count of 9-9-7-7-9. Yours has 7-8-5-6-8. The first stanza feels short. In the second stanza you have, ”...girls thought were fake” when referring to Jake from the first stanza. It should be “was fake” in that instance. I’m not really sure why he wouldn’t wake up from being pushed in a pool. What’s our lesson here?
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Ha ha! This is quite a clever limerick. The rhymes were all well done.
I would change “were” in L2 to “was.”
He was drowned for trying to be cool! Poor guy!
Thank you. :)
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